作者BEN770430 (阿Ben)
看板Eng-Class
標題Re: [請益] 可以幫我訂正一下自我介紹嗎
時間Fri Jul 8 08:11:12 2011
※ 引述《jaaaab22 (Dabby)》之銘言:
: 可以幫我糾正文法或不自然的用法嗎
: 謝謝
: I was born in Kaohsiung. Father works in Taiwan Power Company, and Mother
My father my
: is a beautiful housewife. I have two brothers and a sister, all of us grown
and we all grew
: up in a lovely house. Four years ago, I came to Taipei for learning by
went
: myself. It pushed me to be a independent person.
, which pushed me an
: In my four years of college, I joined to the volleyball club and badminton
During my four years college life,
: club. In sports club, spirit of teamwork is necessary. Thanks to that, I
In sport clubs, the spirit , which helped me
: could learned how to get along well with my friends. And, I did a lot of
learn how Also,
: part-time job in my college life. It could not only extend my social life,
jobs 這邊不用再說一次這段開頭就說過了
: but also learn the skill how to deal with the problem.
help me learn the skills about how to deal with problems.
: In my spare time, I like singing and watching foreign TV show.Singing
shows
: could release my pressure and watching TV show or program could enrich my
helps me release shows programs enriches
: knowledge. I always try to learn the thing that I never know.
things I have never heard.
: Thank you for listen to my introduction.
listening
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1F:→ hoch:我不知道這是口說還是書面的自我介紹。不過個人認為,該講到 07/08 09:39
2F:→ hoch:的重點完全沒講到。例如學校是哪間,大學學啥,工作經驗為何 07/08 09:40
3F:→ hoch:個人光輝的歷史在哪,長處是什麼, ... etc. 反而浪費篇幅在 07/08 09:41
4F:→ hoch:身家背景。 07/08 09:41
5F:→ hoch:假設你還有一張類似 CV 的書面履歷,那這一段自介重點應該在 07/08 09:43
6F:→ hoch:濃縮你的光榮精歷,讓對方在一兩分鐘之內知道為何要花時間 07/08 09:44
7F:→ hoch: 經歷 07/08 09:45
8F:→ hoch:聽或是閱讀你的自我介紹。沒有人對你的兄弟姊妹,你愛看的電 07/08 09:46
9F:→ hoch:視節目感興趣的。 07/08 09:46
10F:推 iken8782:改過之後 還是有很多錯誤喔 ^^ 07/08 13:09