我覺得重點都沒有講到, 第一段life is more than working...你是要說生活比工作重要嗎?? 就算你真的這麼覺得, 那也不要讓你的老闆知道... 我覺得第一段都是多餘的, 沒有人會想知道這些事情 第二段應該多講一些學業上的東西, 更具體的東西, 有那麼多的EE科系, 你們學校的EE專常在哪裡, 那你又學到了啥麼, 第三段還要多講一些實際上的工作內容, 聽你講完, 我也不知道 你的工作到底是啥麼 最後, 是有規定要寫英文自傳嗎?? 你這種英文肯定是扣分的... ※ 引述《hsuwen (我是個胖子~)》之銘言： : 各位好,希望能幫我改通順及簡單扼要,謝謝大家了!!! : First,thank you for giving me the chance for the interview. : I'd like to divide introduction myself into 3 parts of brief introduction : myself,eduction background,work experiences. : Starting from first section,my name is ABC, : I was born and raised a loving family with my parents and a younger brother. : I think life is more than working so in my free time,I like to go hiking, : travel,exercising and social activities.By these hobbies I can refuel : my energy and replenish my stamina to let me try to do my best on all : tough things. : Then about education background,I graduated from ABC University in 2009 : with a bachelor degree in Electrical Engineering.I have learned many things : In four years of my university such as how to be a good leader as being : a class monitor at school,how to be a good team worker at student clubs, : and how to solve many difficult problems about creating : interpersonal relationship,adapting environment and graduating on time : by myself in my transfer student life that is the most influenced me : deeply.Let me be more sociable,more independent and more positive ! : After eduction background, I'd like to talk about working experiences. : The most impressed of part-time jobs is transport workers in cake factory : and promotional staff in the hypermarket.When I need to spend my more : strength,that will be more stronger to me. When I keep a friendly attitude : that made myself approachable to customers for promotion,that can train my : communication skil.I also learned how to do my best and be responsible for : own work.Whether the experiences in studying or working that taught : me how to communicate with people, how to respond to the problems and : how to solve them. I really enjoy these kinds of jobs. : Please give me a chance. Thank you so much!! --

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