我觉得重点都没有讲到, 第一段life is more than working...你是要说生活比工作重要吗?? 就算你真的这麽觉得, 那也不要让你的老板知道... 我觉得第一段都是多余的, 没有人会想知道这些事情 第二段应该多讲一些学业上的东西, 更具体的东西, 有那麽多的EE科系, 你们学校的EE专常在哪里, 那你又学到了啥麽, 第三段还要多讲一些实际上的工作内容, 听你讲完, 我也不知道 你的工作到底是啥麽 最後, 是有规定要写英文自传吗?? 你这种英文肯定是扣分的... ※ 引述《hsuwen (我是个胖子~)》之铭言： : 各位好,希望能帮我改通顺及简单扼要,谢谢大家了!!! : First,thank you for giving me the chance for the interview. : I'd like to divide introduction myself into 3 parts of brief introduction : myself,eduction background,work experiences. : Starting from first section,my name is ABC, : I was born and raised a loving family with my parents and a younger brother. : I think life is more than working so in my free time,I like to go hiking, : travel,exercising and social activities.By these hobbies I can refuel : my energy and replenish my stamina to let me try to do my best on all : tough things. : Then about education background,I graduated from ABC University in 2009 : with a bachelor degree in Electrical Engineering.I have learned many things : In four years of my university such as how to be a good leader as being : a class monitor at school,how to be a good team worker at student clubs, : and how to solve many difficult problems about creating : interpersonal relationship,adapting environment and graduating on time : by myself in my transfer student life that is the most influenced me : deeply.Let me be more sociable,more independent and more positive ! : After eduction background, I'd like to talk about working experiences. : The most impressed of part-time jobs is transport workers in cake factory : and promotional staff in the hypermarket.When I need to spend my more : strength,that will be more stronger to me. When I keep a friendly attitude : that made myself approachable to customers for promotion,that can train my : communication skil.I also learned how to do my best and be responsible for : own work.Whether the experiences in studying or working that taught : me how to communicate with people, how to respond to the problems and : how to solve them. I really enjoy these kinds of jobs. : Please give me a chance. Thank you so much!! --

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