作者weki57 (麥小伊)
看板Eng-Class
標題[請益] 可以幫我看一下有沒有文法錯的地方= =?
時間Tue Jun 8 07:58:46 2010
Still have a dream,but never realized.
Still love a person,but never happy.
Still have a broken soul,and still lonely.
不好意思因為少用英文
想問一下這樣寫的話有沒有文法錯或是不通順的地方@@?感謝
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如果我是那雨滴的話…
那麼，我能夠像把不曾交會的天空與大地連接起來那樣…
把某人的心串聯起來嗎？
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1F：推 noruas:連接詞but,and後面要加主詞she 06/08 12:21
2F：→ noruas:另外,動詞也不見了..(but she is never happy) 06/08 12:22
3F：→ noruas:(and she is still lonely.) 06/08 12:22
4F：→ noruas:我把Still看成she..抱歉 Orz 06/08 12:23
5F：→ noruas:(I) Still have a dream but never realize it. 06/08 12:23
6F：→ noruas:(I) Still love a person but never feel happy. 06/08 12:24
7F：→ noruas:(I) Still have a broken soul and still feel lonely. 06/08 12:25
8F：推 Verloc:最後一句怪怪的...什麼叫broken soul and still lonely?? 06/09 06:33
9F：→ Verloc:而且好像沒有broken soul這種講法...troubled soul比較好? 06/09 06:34
10F：推 noruas:通常是用broken heart~ 但原波想用broken soul也可以 06/09 18:41
11F：→ noruas:但是troubled不太好..因為有"精神狀態不正常"的意思 06/09 18:43
12F：→ noruas:比如: troubled mind 06/09 18:43