作者weki57 (麦小伊)
看板Eng-Class
标题[请益] 可以帮我看一下有没有文法错的地方= =?
时间Tue Jun 8 07:58:46 2010
Still have a dream,but never realized.
Still love a person,but never happy.
Still have a broken soul,and still lonely.
不好意思因为少用英文
想问一下这样写的话有没有文法错或是不通顺的地方@@?感谢
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如果我是那雨滴的话…
那麽，我能够像把不曾交会的天空与大地连接起来那样…
把某人的心串联起来吗？
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1F：推 noruas:连接词but,and後面要加主词she 06/08 12:21
2F：→ noruas:另外,动词也不见了..(but she is never happy) 06/08 12:22
3F：→ noruas:(and she is still lonely.) 06/08 12:22
4F：→ noruas:我把Still看成she..抱歉 Orz 06/08 12:23
5F：→ noruas:(I) Still have a dream but never realize it. 06/08 12:23
6F：→ noruas:(I) Still love a person but never feel happy. 06/08 12:24
7F：→ noruas:(I) Still have a broken soul and still feel lonely. 06/08 12:25
8F：推 Verloc:最後一句怪怪的...什麽叫broken soul and still lonely?? 06/09 06:33
9F：→ Verloc:而且好像没有broken soul这种讲法...troubled soul比较好? 06/09 06:34
10F：推 noruas:通常是用broken heart~ 但原波想用broken soul也可以 06/09 18:41
11F：→ noruas:但是troubled不太好..因为有"精神状态不正常"的意思 06/09 18:43
12F：→ noruas:比如: troubled mind 06/09 18:43