: I (XXX) would like to apply the dormitory of the University of XXX because : these following reasons: This is Mike Wang. I am writing this letter to apply for a room in University of Tokyo's school dormitory. : 1.I believe that the experience of living in the dormitory of XXX will a : broaden my horizon because I can interactive with those students coming from those 去掉 : different country. Speaking of my personality, I am a friendly person so I countries. 这里前後两句没有关连性，放在同一段很牵强。 : believe that I can get along very well with other foreign students in the 刚才已经『believe』过了。不要重复使用。 : dormitory. 我实在不了解为什麽申请宿舍要牵扯到 『broaden horizon』。不就是先来後到？ 满了就排候补？而且只有『friendly』的人才有资格住宿舍？ : 2.The accommodation fee of the dormitory is very reasonable especially for : privately financed international students. Besides, the Tokyo’s living cost 个人觉得这一句『The accommodation .... students』应该删掉。 Tokyo's living expense is significantly higher than that of other cities in Japan, thus an opportunity for me to stay in a school dormitory would greatly reduce my financial burden. : is higher than other cities. If I have the chance to live in the dormitory it : will be greatly relieve my financial pressure. 底下这一句该删掉。 : According to these reasons, it will be very appreciate and gratitude if you : can offer the dormitory to me. ※ 编辑: hoch 来自: 120.126.36.193 (01/19 14:04)