※ 引述《cathywang (雲淡風輕)》之銘言： : 我家小朋友寫的 可以請版上老師幫忙看一下嗎 : 謝謝 : -------------------------------------------------------------------- : Learning English has been nearly six years, but I learned 整篇都有中式英文的問題, 此句but前後主詞最好統一, 文法上會扣分. : not too fast. When I was in elementary school, I was not very 改成I am a slow learner in English. : concentrate on this. Until the summer before entering junior 此字改成concentrated. : high school, I was transferred GEPT class. Suddenly, I had a 改成was transferred to a class for GEPT. : big pressure. At that time, my teacher made us read novels us 改成me 對應前面的my : and speak them. It was a big change for learning English. I for me to learn English : remembered that my first novel was "Treasure Island." Reading the first novel I read was Treasure Island. : this novel let me suffer pain. I needed to spend a lot of time made me suffer. : looking up new words, translating sentences, and understanding translating the sentences : the meaning. For me, it's chapfallen. Fortunately, my teacher it was 作文中通常不建議用縮寫 : has been encouraging me and let me continue to make letting 對應and前面的現在完成進行式 : breakthroughs. After one month, I finished it. That was a One month later, : memorable experience. Quite a sense of accomplishment. 加入I got 不然此句不完全(句子由主詞和動詞組成) 總評: 如果是20分作文, 長度內容10分得5分, 文法五分得2分, 用字遣詞5分得2分, 共9分. 從文章判斷其寫作問題大致有下列幾點: 1. 中式英文問題, 有些句子看得懂, 但事實上就不是這樣表達, 如 a slow learner. 2. 被動式用的不正確或不清楚何時使用, 如 be transferred to. 3. 使用連接詞and或but時忽略前後主詞及時態要對應的問題. 4. 動詞時態掌控不錯, 國中生會使用現在完成進行式還蠻讓我訝異的, 雖然後面and連接的時態錯了(let 要改成lets 或 letting) 建議: 1. 國文作文可能要加強, 這篇很顯然是用中文翻成英文後的結果, 但老實講 翻成中文看也可以感覺出其結構鬆散的問題. 像這麼短的文章都無法從 中心主題嚴密發展, 分數不會高. 2. 文章中有些動詞用法掌控不是很好, 應該是說不會用還是查字典只看中文 意思? 實務教學上, 我們都會建議學生用基礎單字搭配必用句型, 以保險 的作法去寫, 避免用錯被扣分的情況. --

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