※ 引述《cathywang (云淡风轻)》之铭言： : 我家小朋友写的 可以请版上老师帮忙看一下吗 : 谢谢 : -------------------------------------------------------------------- : Learning English has been nearly six years, but I learned 整篇都有中式英文的问题, 此句but前後主词最好统一, 文法上会扣分. : not too fast. When I was in elementary school, I was not very 改成I am a slow learner in English. : concentrate on this. Until the summer before entering junior 此字改成concentrated. : high school, I was transferred GEPT class. Suddenly, I had a 改成was transferred to a class for GEPT. : big pressure. At that time, my teacher made us read novels us 改成me 对应前面的my : and speak them. It was a big change for learning English. I for me to learn English : remembered that my first novel was "Treasure Island." Reading the first novel I read was Treasure Island. : this novel let me suffer pain. I needed to spend a lot of time made me suffer. : looking up new words, translating sentences, and understanding translating the sentences : the meaning. For me, it's chapfallen. Fortunately, my teacher it was 作文中通常不建议用缩写 : has been encouraging me and let me continue to make letting 对应and前面的现在完成进行式 : breakthroughs. After one month, I finished it. That was a One month later, : memorable experience. Quite a sense of accomplishment. 加入I got 不然此句不完全(句子由主词和动词组成) 总评: 如果是20分作文, 长度内容10分得5分, 文法五分得2分, 用字遣词5分得2分, 共9分. 从文章判断其写作问题大致有下列几点: 1. 中式英文问题, 有些句子看得懂, 但事实上就不是这样表达, 如 a slow learner. 2. 被动式用的不正确或不清楚何时使用, 如 be transferred to. 3. 使用连接词and或but时忽略前後主词及时态要对应的问题. 4. 动词时态掌控不错, 国中生会使用现在完成进行式还蛮让我讶异的, 虽然後面and连接的时态错了(let 要改成lets 或 letting) 建议: 1. 国文作文可能要加强, 这篇很显然是用中文翻成英文後的结果, 但老实讲 翻成中文看也可以感觉出其结构松散的问题. 像这麽短的文章都无法从 中心主题严密发展, 分数不会高. 2. 文章中有些动词用法掌控不是很好, 应该是说不会用还是查字典只看中文 意思? 实务教学上, 我们都会建议学生用基础单字搭配必用句型, 以保险 的作法去写, 避免用错被扣分的情况. --

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