※ 引述《econometric (計量天使)》之銘言： 1. I think...句型用太多；多用形容詞形容就好。 2. example的敘述太少而且不夠detail 拉長example的同時也可以把你的回答變長一些。 這樣的回答太簡潔了。 3. 建議上網找HP的書評或簡介，直接學裡面的用法最快也最好。 　 amazon應該兩個都有。 4. 文法錯有點多要小心。 : Well, Harry Potter is an interesting book I have read. 我覺得可以改一下， Harry Potter is my favorite novel. 就ok了。 大不了前面加一句 I love to read fantasy fictions, and ... of all. : This article is about the fantasy series. article是指文章或論文。 可以用novel, fiction或直接用story, book比較好。 我建議用story。 受詞也怪怪的， 翻成中文是：這個文章是形容一個奇幻小說系列。 不大懂.. 而且敘述有點太少。 你可以說它敘述一個正邪對抗的魔法世界。 : And there are 2 reasons why I think it interesting. : First of all, it is full of imagination. : For example, Harry Potter can study magic in school with his friends : and he can use magic power to fly in the sky. 像這句就是沒有錯但念起來不大順的那種... 你可以直接形容HP用他的魔法掃把飛行.. : Also, this story is very adventureful. : For example, that Harry Potter fights evil wizard Lord Voldermort : is very exciting. that要去掉； 然後主詞應該是the (magic) fight between HP and Voldermort : That's reasons why I think Horry Potter is very interesting. These are the reasons why... 我沒有很細的全部挑過去.. 只有抓幾個錯比較明顯的而已.. -- 而且我沒有看過哈利跌倒.. 所以幫不上什麼忙XDDD --

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