※ 引述《anythingwhat (琉璃)》之銘言： : A Plan of finding a job : I want to get a job of management manger. : First about professional ability : So when I was a student in college, I would read about management’s magazines in library twice a week. : With teachers discussed cases of some corporations. 這一段很明顯是用中文思考，直接用中文對應英文字寫出來的。 所以看不到英文應有的文法架構。 但其實不用改動太多，把正確的架構放進去， 就可以表達得很漂亮。 I want to get the job as a manager. Therefore, the first thing to improve is my expertise. As a student in college, I plan to read magazines on management, and discuss cases of corporations with my teachers. 這樣寫是就表達的內容簡單修正， 當然，如果要寫得更漂亮，內容就得更充實才行。 例如第三句： As a student in college, I would like to take the advantages of the academic resources provided by the school, and blah blah blah... : After class, I spent three hours for working. It would get salary by working. : The salary was not rich. 這段主要是時態的問題。講的是未來的事， 為什麼會用過去式表達呢？ : But the value is achievement feeling and establish later to work the foundation ability. 這段也是用中文思考的結果。而且是以「字」為單位思考出現的狀況。 至少要以「詞」為單位來翻譯才會有個樣子， 以「句」來思考才會比較正確。 至於更高段的以「段」來思考，那已經不只是英文的問題了， 中文寫作也得要好才行。 The rewards will be a sense of achievement, and the establishment of foundamental abilities for later works. : Second about the language ability : I hope I can work in foreign company. 基本文法問題。 The second is my language ability. （proficiency會更好。) I hope I can work in a foreign company in the future, so language, in my opinion, is important. （要更漂亮的話，可寫...is of great importance） 用的字沒有差很多，只是照文法規則擺而已，但效果會不一樣。 : So I think the language is the important thing. : Remembered 50 vocabulary and phrase a day and read 1 article of English in a week. : And take examines in English to quiz the language ability of mine. : The two things is my plan of finding a job. 這也是文法跟時態的問題，另外還有數量一致性的錯誤。 英文句子主詞跟動詞不能省，而表達計畫多用不定詞。 I plan to memorize 50 new words and phrases a day, and read one English article each week. I would take exams in English to test my language ability. These two items make up my plan of finding a job. : 我基礎寫作真的不太好，但是我會努力練習寫作！ : 或許在這篇文章裡面會出現很多錯誤！但是我會加油！ : 希望在畢業時我也可以交出一篇英文專題出來！這是我的目標~ : 謝謝各位 加油，沒有人一開始就很強的，一定要多多練習喔！ --

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