※ 引述《anythingwhat (琉璃)》之铭言： : A Plan of finding a job : I want to get a job of management manger. : First about professional ability : So when I was a student in college, I would read about management’s magazines in library twice a week. : With teachers discussed cases of some corporations. 这一段很明显是用中文思考，直接用中文对应英文字写出来的。 所以看不到英文应有的文法架构。 但其实不用改动太多，把正确的架构放进去， 就可以表达得很漂亮。 I want to get the job as a manager. Therefore, the first thing to improve is my expertise. As a student in college, I plan to read magazines on management, and discuss cases of corporations with my teachers. 这样写是就表达的内容简单修正， 当然，如果要写得更漂亮，内容就得更充实才行。 例如第三句： As a student in college, I would like to take the advantages of the academic resources provided by the school, and blah blah blah... : After class, I spent three hours for working. It would get salary by working. : The salary was not rich. 这段主要是时态的问题。讲的是未来的事， 为什麽会用过去式表达呢？ : But the value is achievement feeling and establish later to work the foundation ability. 这段也是用中文思考的结果。而且是以「字」为单位思考出现的状况。 至少要以「词」为单位来翻译才会有个样子， 以「句」来思考才会比较正确。 至於更高段的以「段」来思考，那已经不只是英文的问题了， 中文写作也得要好才行。 The rewards will be a sense of achievement, and the establishment of foundamental abilities for later works. : Second about the language ability : I hope I can work in foreign company. 基本文法问题。 The second is my language ability. （proficiency会更好。) I hope I can work in a foreign company in the future, so language, in my opinion, is important. （要更漂亮的话，可写...is of great importance） 用的字没有差很多，只是照文法规则摆而已，但效果会不一样。 : So I think the language is the important thing. : Remembered 50 vocabulary and phrase a day and read 1 article of English in a week. : And take examines in English to quiz the language ability of mine. : The two things is my plan of finding a job. 这也是文法跟时态的问题，另外还有数量一致性的错误。 英文句子主词跟动词不能省，而表达计画多用不定词。 I plan to memorize 50 new words and phrases a day, and read one English article each week. I would take exams in English to test my language ability. These two items make up my plan of finding a job. : 我基础写作真的不太好，但是我会努力练习写作！ : 或许在这篇文章里面会出现很多错误！但是我会加油！ : 希望在毕业时我也可以交出一篇英文专题出来！这是我的目标~ : 谢谢各位 加油，没有人一开始就很强的，一定要多多练习喔！ --

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