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謝謝大家好好人喔 ~~~ 那我就貼兩篇,請小小鞭,我下周要考試了,焦慮一百分。 Having discussed traffic and contamination is a frequent issue in the contemporary society. It is no doubt that increasing the price of oil is an appropriate method for saving crowded traffic, avoiding pollution. However, in my personal opinion, I assert there is more effective way to cope with the situation. Based on the rules of user-payer, there are always some wealthy people or big company would like to spend money and to ignore the pollution issue. In summer, they are able to afford high price of bill and refuse to turn off the air condition. Beside, the factories operate the machine without any break for more profits. Therefore, rising price of petrol is not the best idea to restrict to make pollution. In terms of better measure, it is the government policy that regulates the traffic and pollution development. The authority plays a pivotal rule in solving these problems due to its power. More specifically, a high effective public transport system is expected to ease traffic. Taking Melbourne for a good example, here, the tram is the main public transport. Not only for its convenience, but also the lower price. It has now become the most popular mode of transportation in that city. The residents commute between city and suburb quickly due to the satisfied traffic planning. Moreover, these trams could prevent people drive car through the city and limited parking space also annoys drivers. As a result, the decreasing rate of driving allows traffic relief. Surely, the air pollution could get a solution. To sum up, I disagree with the point which believes enhancing oil price is the best strategy to resolve traffic and pollution problems. It is necessary to enable people to realize their duty to protect the environment rather than to solve the problem. ____________我是第二篇_______________________________________________________ In the present age, people are having a hard time suffering missing unique dialects and customs. It might result in some problems such as tradition disappearing, the sense of belonging changed and declining the competitiveness of local people. In this essay, I will analyze the factors regarding to this issue. First of all, handy transport system dramatically improved people’s life. Modern people only take a few hours to fly to other countries, the rapid traffic allows different folks communicate more frequently. While people start to contact, the prevailing culture might affect or even erode the other one. According to linguistic research, minority group would try to acquire the bigger group’s language for communicating. By contrast, the big group usually domain the higher social position. In most contact situations, the stronger language speakers will increase and the weak one might lose their confidence and the culture disappears in a not long period. The other factor should be taken into account is media. Nowadays, American and European countries broadcast their programs which including cultures, lifestyle and preference. Obviously, they influence million audiences’ mind and habits around the world, like Valentine’s Day, fast food. For another instance, many people prefer watching Hollywood movies to local movies due to the international starts and high technique. As a result, in small country, no producer would like to invest in history recording. The local culture sooner will be ignore and disappear. To sum up, the reasons of losing languages and cultures are advanced transport and media development. As far I am convinced that both of them boost the change of society. --



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1F:→ yooyoovicky:篇幅有限就省略題目囉,第一篇是agree第二篇是report 06/02 20:50
2F:→ SinoHuang:問題不小。不可能拿7。改一改6分倒是很有機會。 06/02 20:55
3F:→ SinoHuang:第一篇隨便列幾個大問題:1.第一句就讓人看不懂。 06/02 20:59
4F:→ SinoHuang:2.你要駁斥的內容卻用"no doubt",立場混淆。 06/02 20:59
5F:→ SinoHuang:3.字句掌控能力不足,第一段只有三句,句句出錯。 06/02 21:01
6F:→ SinoHuang:4.第三段講government,結論卻講people,不一致。 06/02 21:03
7F:→ SinoHuang:結構內容倒還OK。第一段修一下、結論改一下,六分穩。 06/02 21:05
8F:→ yooyoovicky:大感謝!看到最後一句才嶄露本日笑顏。你好細心,謝謝 06/02 21:08
9F:→ yooyoovicky:第一篇是我舊的作業,剛剛看的時候發現以前寫得更差, 06/02 21:09
10F:→ yooyoovicky:改了一下有點不三不四,但大致我是這樣寫 06/02 21:09
11F:→ SinoHuang:小地方提醒,1.很多處忘記連接詞。要記得逗點不算連接。 06/02 22:12
12F:→ SinoHuang:2.除非你有三↑並列,不然不要說first of "all"。 06/02 22:12
13F:→ SinoHuang:3.模板句本身沒問題,問題在水準要跟上,才不會不搭。 06/02 22:15
14F:→ SinoHuang:這些都是小地方。我認為你最迫切要做的是文章的純質化。 06/02 22:17
15F:→ SinoHuang:主旨要釘住。政府就政府,人民就人民。開頭講到的東西 06/02 22:18
16F:→ SinoHuang:寫body的時候要接住,然後結論把他們包起來。要像點帳款 06/02 22:19
17F:→ SinoHuang:一樣,不能多、不能少。這樣可以做到coherence。這是一 06/02 22:20
18F:→ SinoHuang:篇文章最重要的地方。 06/02 22:20
19F:→ SinoHuang:p.s.關代(含子句)複習一下...錯漏的很多是關代。 06/02 22:22
20F:→ SinoHuang:多項試評:字彙6.5~7但用法打回6.5↓,文法5.5~6(可改) 06/02 22:39
21F:→ SinoHuang:架構內容第二篇有6.5。但如果出現第一篇那樣首段走樣、 06/02 22:41
22F:→ SinoHuang:主段與結論不符的致命情形,就可能被打回5.5。 06/02 22:41
23F:→ SinoHuang:結論:程度約6.3,避免致命=>穩6。缺點改完=>6.5 OK。 06/02 22:48
24F:→ surfingdream:請還是給題目, 沒題目不知道有沒有文不對題 06/06 08:54







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