作者wu52iou (薇*)
看板Eng-Class
標題[請益] 英文詩修改
時間Mon Jun 20 00:24:17 2011
For You
Thank you for accompanying me
And loving me for such a long time
So happy these years i used to be
Though sometimes hopeless climb
To have a romance with you,i was dreaming
A little girl have a crush on you
But she hid her feeling
Of falling in love with you
She forgot those embarrassing thing
Of the past, because you
A little girl dare not thinking
Of have a cuddle from you
Things happend unexpectly
We began our relationship in the summer
But we fought over trifling things easily
The frist time we fought, you wrote a letter
Told me your sadness gently
And hope me have a better future
And this time, maybe the last time we fought
You told me the same, and i want to say
Im happy you are the same guy, i thoght
I will miss you until the day
I love someone else, you're the one i never forgot
這是我自己寫的...但我不知道這樣押韻對不對
麻煩有研究的人給我一點意見
或是有那些地方需要改的
謝謝大家^^!!
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1F：推 cooxander:第一和最後一段的押韻還不錯，但我個人不喜歡也很少 06/20 08:29
2F：→ cooxander:看到單純靠字尾變化湊成的韻腳，一點建議^^ 06/20 08:30
3F：→ wu52iou:那請問...這樣的內容會不會太白話 不太像詩QQ? 06/20 13:50