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标题[请问]日前试译文章~结果不太理想~想请问大大该朝何修改>"<
时间Wed Mar 11 11:59:53 2009
Ben Stiller and Bulgari visit Uganda in support of Save the Children’s
Rewrite the Future campaign
班史提勒和宝格丽为与「SAVE THE CHILDREN」救助儿童会合作的「改写未来」活动拜访
乌干达
Kampala, Uganda – February 2009, Ben Stiller, one of the supporters of the
fundraising campaign created by Bulgari for Save the Children, Rewrite the
future, visited the remote area of Karamoja in the northeastern part of
Uganda to have a first-hand understanding of childhood conditions in a
country affected by conflict.
乌干达首都坎培拉-西元2009年2月,身为顶级珠宝厂商宝格丽与「SAVE THE CHILDREN」救
助儿童会合作的「改写未来」慈善活动募款人之ㄧ的班史提勒,日前为了能亲自了解当地
贫童的情况而远赴深受战乱影响,位处乌干达东北部的卡拉莫贾.
Stiller’s 4 day visit, planned and organized by Bulgari, included a number
of different Save the Children interventions, from strengthening child
protection structures to the promotion of civil-military relations for peace
building operations. His visit also included formal and non-formal education
programs, where he participated in school classes and interacted with the
children, their communities and Save the Children staff.
史提勒在此停留四天之久,行程皆由宝格丽规划,一系列的活动包括扶助孩童的相关措施,
其范畴由加强幼童保护组织到为了和平而倡导的「民-军行动」.他的探访也包含正式及
非正式的教育方案,包含进入校园亲自和小朋友们互动,以及走访当地的社区和救助儿童参
谋机构
Predominantly nomadic and characterized by inter ethnic armed conflicts,
competition for water, livestock theft and rustling, Karamoja has had decades
of instability and conflicts which have undermined the general development of
Karamojong people and has particularly affected women and children.
到处可见的流浪汉以及种族冲突後留下的残骸,水资源的争夺,家畜的偷窃.卡拉莫贾数十
年来的动荡不安以及战乱不但埋葬了许多当地居民应有的发展,甚至深深的影响了女人和
幼童的生活.
Uganda is a country emerging from the devastation of decades of civil wars
and family’s displacement, where children still struggle to access basic
services, healthcare and education.
Uganda has the highest proportion of children orphaned with HIV/AIDS and
records the abduction of over 60'000 children. Present in Uganda since 1959,
Save the Children, Rewrite the Future campaign aims to bring education in
fragile countries and war-torn communities to protect children from violence,
to help them change the course of their life and break the cycle of poverty
and conflict.
乌干达数十年来的荒废使其显露出是一个内战不止且充满许多流离失所之家庭的城市,可
怜的贫童们依旧为了基本的温饱和教育问题而奋斗着.
As part of the initiatives scheduled for 2009 to celebrate the 125th
anniversary of its foundation, Bulgari has chosen to support the “Rewrite
the Future” campaign of Save the Children, the largest independent
international organisation for the defence and championing of children’s
rights, present in over 100 countries around the world.
珠宝大厂宝格丽2009年初步的规划,决定以支持救助儿童会,全球最大,已遍布超过100个国
家,也最致力於为孩童争取权益之机构,的「改写未来」活动来庆祝其125周年盛事.
大家好
我非相关科系的学生
只是喜欢看文章和国外影集
所以程度应该是偏低
系上课又满重的没办法再修外文系的翻译课程
所以想请问各位大大我的用字遣词出了什麽问题呢
还有我这样真的满糟的吗(我知道超多强者埋伏在这的>"<)
拜托大家不吝指教我...谢谢你们!!
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1F:推 Kyral:建议你选一段文字当代表就好了@@" 03/11 16:01
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