作者dvlin (Dee)
看板ST-English
标题Re: [写作班] 托福第15周,dwings,3
时间Wed Jul 16 05:49:46 2008
※ 引述《dwings (夜空的精灵)》之铭言:
: : 3. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks)
: : encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to
: : support your opinion.
: I agree the statement that grades can encourage students to learn. Setting
^with
* ^^^^^^^
*"I agree with the statement that grades..." or "giving"
or
"I agree (that) grades..."
: marks could let students study more efficiently and effectively than other ways
make
: of teaching. There are many reasons that I support that grades should be used
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
(not necessary)
: to teach students, and I will mention some important ones below.
: It can not deny that other kinds of ways of teaching without grades also
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
"It cannot be denied that..." or "It is undeniable that..."
: inspire students. Moreover, someone argues that grades would make students
Some may even argue that grades...
: focus the results instead of process of learning. However, students might
: loss the motivation to study hard. For example, when I studied in the graduate
lose was studying
: school, I took a part-time job to teach sigh-language in a junior high school.
: Because the school just wanted to plan a leisure activity for students,
: students could pass the class without any effort. Consequently, some of the
: students in that class had no interests to learn. Moreover, they often made a
: lot of noise and interrupted the whole class. It frustrated me a lot, but I
: had nothing to do. Therefore, I think grades do work to make students learn.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
couldn't do anything about it.
: Using marks to encourage students can be a kind of incentives. Students will
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
*
or "can give them incentive."
: learn hard to get high scores. At least, they will learn in order to pass the
: course. Furthermore, grades also can be a kind of feedback. If they put a lot
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
* ^in
or "can provide feedback."
*Try to avoid using "a kind of..." in this sense. It's better if you can make
your reader/evaluator feel that you know exactly what you're talking about.
: of efforts to learn, high grades will give them a sense of achievement. On the
x would
: contrary, if they got low scores, they would study hard to improve it.
: For example, when preparing the entrance exam of graduate school, I had spent
: almost seven months and studied every day. I almost sacrificed all
: entertainment to study. Finally, I got high scores in the exam and admission
: into my first choice. At that moment, I was so happy just like I had own the
: world. For those reasons, grades are good tools to inspire students.
: To sum up, students will be inspired to study hard for good performance.
: Though there might be some problems, such as overemphasizing on the results,
: if we take a closer look, grades do bring students more benefits. As long as
: the way of teaching could be made properly, marks absolutely are the "driving
: power" to lead students’ learning.
^^^^^^^
"driving force"
: 不太会写结论
: 改写philJamy的最後一段
: 希望philJamy不要介意呀....>.<:
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