Some suggestions. ※ 引述《jjomj (onf viav)》之铭言： : 大家好 : 初次来到贵宝地 很想参加大家的写作练习 : 小弟最近也写了一篇文章 : 想看看这样的文章在一般研究所或大学程度来讲的话 : 以一百分来计 能拿到几分呢 ~? : 因为小弟对自己写作没什麽信心....所以可能会很多写不好的地方 : 请大家多多包涵 : ------------------------------------------------------------------------ : English teaching and Internet : In recent years, learning English has become a new trend in Taiwan; : it could be said that it is a phenomenon of the times. Also, there are ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ This seems to represent the same idea as last sentence;avoid redundant usage : numerous cram school of English teaching everywhere. Although it is very English cram schools (remember: simple is good) : convenient to learn English, these courses are costly. For this reason, : Internet plays an important roles in nowdays English teaching. There are also the role English teaching nowadays : many benefits from leanring English online such as convenience, flexible : courses,and the low price, some even free of charge. low costs (non-restrictive, the is needless) : To begin with, unlike traditional class, learners can learn English : online whenever they want, whatever they like, and wherever they will be : as long as they have a computer wired. Learners don't have to go ouside for : a class instead of having a cup of coffee and can have a cozy and relaxing ;instead, they can have ..... : English learning online at home. When it come to convenience, nothing can : compare with Internet. : In addition to the convenience of learning English online, it can : provide flexible and a variety of courses such as online tutors, grammar : explanation, and literature correction. Moreover, the courses are very : flexible beyond your imagination. For example, learners can have a game : with English learning which enable learners to learn from games. Hence, This enables : kind of activity is both entertaining and informative.Indeed,by choosing topics : that interest learners in the language, they can achieve remarkable results. : Furthermore, learning English online can eliminate learners' : tension and provide an environment in which the anxiety from learners will : be disburden. Using Internet, learners don't have to face teachers or any : one else online. anyone : As the teaching methods have come and gone, so have English teaching Not so sure about the meaning of the author and grammar usage : trends waxed and waned in popularity. On other words, time changes and the In other words time flows : way of teaching should keep up with the times. Consequently, we need to In Chinese we say "keep up with time", but it's kinda weird in English. keep up with trend may be a better solution. : figure out the best way to learn English to serve the purpose. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^weird usage. I guess you mean 'meet the demand'? : ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- : 以上 : 感谢你的耐心读完 : 若小弟有miss版规的部份 一定亲自删除 : 也谢谢版主及版友创这个版 : 造福一些想练习写作的人 : thx !! Some thoughts of this writing: 1. No fatal grammatical errors are made. That means you do well on organizing main structure of sentences. 2. Consider replacing some weird expressions or words (maybe originally organized by Chinese thinking) to make it look fluent. 3. The remaining is to train yourself to express with best and concise vocabulary Hope this help. ;) --

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