作者marvelousbre ( )
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标题[翻译] 不好意思 这是我朋友的英文自传 想请大家帮他看看
时间Sun Apr 8 00:33:27 2007
My name is XXX. I majored in OOO at XX University.
Besides, I just got the degree of master of OOO at XX University.
When I was a college student, I always took great responsibility
in club and held many activities at school.
I learned how to communicate and cooperate with others in club,
so I paid much attention to interpersonal management and communication.
Therefore, I love to communicate with others, and I think that
I am suitable for the work of human resources.
I just graduated from XXX. Thus I often tell myself to be humble and
try my best to learn anything.
I have good literal and oral expression ability,
and I always ask myself to progress everyday.
I love challenges and hope you can give me an opportunity
to be a member of your company.
请各位好心的大大用力挑错吧 感恩呀
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1F：推 stranck:错我就不知道啦，我还不够强... 不过有一句可以改一改： 04/08 00:38
2F：→ stranck:and I think that I am suitable for the work of... 改成 04/08 00:39
3F：→ stranck:and I believe that I am suitable for the work of... 04/08 00:39
4F：推 marvelousbre:感谢 04/08 01:21
5F：推 chenchuhao:I实在太多了Orz...断句也太多了...看的很吃力... 04/08 11:41
6F：→ chenchuhao:建议可以修得简略一点...不要太多断句... 04/08 11:42
7F：→ chenchuhao:其实照翻成中文来看...也会觉得句子不是很连贯... 04/08 11:42
8F：→ chenchuhao:以上是个人的感觉啦...我也没什麽能力改... 04/08 11:43
9F：推 zoya92:重复的字太多了 是不是可以用同义字替代呢 04/08 12:39
10F：推 cctina:好口语喔....呵呵...最後一句是不是可以不用阿!? 04/22 19:29