你现在问题症结是思考方式。 首先厘清，你写的是论说文，所以你要说服读者你说的是正确的真理，但是甚麽是真理呢 ?其实世界上没有真理，只有作者的自圆其说。然後社群专业同侪检验，你的论点在言论 市场中竞争，看能不能幸运出线。再继续探讨下去会讲更深的哲学，但是目前这样就够了 ，先就此打住。 英文写作思考方式其实就是纲举目张，正反合。大论点底下一定要有(相关的)小论点去支 撑。你谈的所有梗一定都有正反两面，然後激荡冲突以後会有新的真理(合，暂时性)出现 ，之後无限循环下去，所以真理是属於一种不断革命论，然後随时间典范会移转(但是你 一个普通人走不到这一步)，你现在要玩的就是这样的游戏。看到这边你可以想一想为何 你的写作课程是叫做argument essay。这就是一种学术训练的方式，藉由思考、思辨、自 己跟自己打架、自己跟外在世界打架，不断在正反合的循环里激荡，然後勇敢的用你的脑 跟手同心协力把它写出来，成为一个真实的劳动成果。 你主题是关於性别，那就找出三个梗:A、B、C来讲，但是每个梗在现今市场上一定会有正 反(或阴阳或黑白或上下或高低...)的论述，所以你要把你找到的证据在文章主体里表达 成这样: A的 正VS反 小结A(合) B的 正VS反 小结B(合) C的 正VS反 小结C(合) 最後你在整个文章的大结论里，看是要捧哪个多一点，贬哪个多一点，然後自行宏观调控 之後说出自己总结的结论。 你这样做的话，你的老师才看得出你的(正-反-合)思辩过程，至於是不是真的真理他不在 乎，他只在乎你是怎样建构你自己的真理出来，若他认可了，就表示你有独立思考的能力 (这很重要)，人类文明才有继续解放演进的可能。 我发现你心底是在"赞成女生赤膊"跟"为什麽女生被认为不能赤膊"中打转走不出来。 建议你内容就只专心探讨前者就好，把支持你的论点找出来， 跟反对你的论点也找出来，然後把制造的稻草人往死里打， 得出应该要让女人打赤膊的结论。 ※ 引述《D122 (小黑球)》之铭言： : 如题 小弟最近在外国读语言学校 : 虽然是语言的不同 文法 用词习惯让我写英文文章一直受到挫折 : 但最近写Argument Essay一直跟老师有疑惑的点对不上 : 以下是小弟目前草稿 : Gender Topless Equality : Have you ever thought that it is strange that only men can be topless? : In : fact, the attitudes toward women’s bodies are still conservative. For : example, social media, like Instagram, prohibits any pictures with women’s : nipples, but Instagram requires “every” user to wear clothes. In 2015, Adda : Smardottir, a student, held the activity “Free the nipple”. She argued with : the unfair standard of social media. In short, currently, some people still : cannot accept topless women, but actually, bare breasts are not as bad as : most people think, and this argument can be made on three sides, gender : equality, social media, and patriarchy. : Gender topless equality is really a part of gender equality. In our : daily : life, women always wear bras and cover their breasts. Some people think that : it is common, while some people think that it is illogical. Steinfeld (2017) : claimed that women have totally different opinions to whether they can show : their breasts. These differences depend on how they were born and grew up. : Most of all, it is true that attitudes toward genders, especially when : topless, are not equality. However, Steinfeld (2017) showed that in some : cultures around the world, like aboriginal communities, women go topless to : this day. Hence, topless women might not be bad as some people think, and not : every person can not accept topless women. Actually, male and female breasts : are similar in composition, and breasts are just parts of people, but society : just rejects women’s breasts. It is unreasonable, and the right of topless : really belongs to women. Only when women really have the right to decide : whether they show their breasts, Gender equality will exist. : In social media, pictures with topless women are not allowed to be : posted. : Wheeling (2015) showed that Facebook and Instagram have the double standard : when judging pictures with bare humans, and many users’ accounts are closed : due the rule of posting pictures. Moreover, Steinfeld (2017) claimed that the : reason why Facebook banned the topless pictures is that Facebook thought that : some audiences may be sensitive to the pictures. It is necessary to consider : users’ positions. However, Fischtein (2015) mentioned that people aged 60 : and over were least accepting of female topless behavior. It is because older : people tend to be more conservative. It means that the most main users of : social media, younger peoples, accept topless women more than older people. : For another, Steinfeld (2017) claimed that the laws of public indecency are : nebulous, so people can explain them in their own ways. In conclusion, the : reason why Facebook banned users is not very reasonable, because just : minority users can not accept pictures with topless women, but they really : have a choice to reject them. In addition, to argue this controversial : phenomenon, artists created the image of “an acceptable nipple”, a male : nipple for people to paste it on their topless pictures. : Hundreds years ago, people were in a patriarchy. Wheelng (2015) also : claimed : that women are more likely to be treated as sex objects. Patriarchy is a : social system in which men have all the power. The society was controlled by : men, and women were just properties of men. In addition, some people do not : care that women are being dominated by men, and some women even promote this : situations to others, including their daughters. Even in modern times, some : people still treat women as sex objects. It causes the belief that women’s : bodies are sexual and should be covered. However, this concept of females is : really out of date, because in women’s view, men’s bodies are also sexual, : but topless men can be accepted and not against the law of public indecency. : To eliminate the bad tradition from patriarchy, the unfair attitudes toward : women must be changed. : In short, women really have right to show their breasts in public. : There are : many concepts of this topic in three sides, gender equality, social media, : and patriarchy. Compared to attitudes toward topless men, attitudes toward : topless women are too biased. Now, advanced countries are working for gender : equality, but just the view of sex is still conservative. In social media, : the double standard toward different genders is unreasonable. For another, : patriarchy has limited a lot of women’s rights for a long time, and it is : time to change this unreasonable situation. In conclusion, gender topless : equality is necessary and represents an important process of women’s right. : If women can show themselves without bias, the relationship between different : genders would be better, and the society would be kinder and fairer to women. : 因为要用到APA格式引用的关系 找两方观点相关的文章已经很头大了 : 却更被说"没看到三个side的各两方论点" : 虽然列给老师看了 但跟他说还是一个头两个大 : 尤其在Social media那一段 老师是说没两方点 但我是要反驳"Facebook方的想法" : 是因为我说得太委婉吗(同学表示) 还是Organization上的问题呢(不习惯的点) : 因为老师一直跳针的点是他不清楚哪个点 但跟他问了很久他却也只是说不行 : 所以想请各位提供意见 感谢 --

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