: 因公司要mail简单的自我介绍,所以还请帮忙修改一下,谢谢 : Dear all, : I am XXX, an administrator from CCC and reporting to XXX. It's really an 老实说我看不懂你这个 CCC 是旧公司？然後 XXX 是新公司？ My name is George Johnson. I am the newly appointed procurement officer of ACB Design Group Inc. Before joining this company, I have ten years of working experiences at the procurement department of Tinkle Technologies. : honor to join this big family and I'm so glad to work with you. 个人觉得 『It's ... honor .... so glad ...』这一句是赘句。而且西方人 大概不吃这一套。你的『公司』是硬要用英文的台湾公司又另当别论。 : I graduated from XXX University this year with a Bachelor degree in : International Business. This summer, I joined a program which named - bachelor 不必大写 - international business 也不必大写 : "Work and Travel in United State". In the past 3 months, I learned how to : become an independent person and get more responsibility. I had a chance to participate in the "Work and Travel USA" program over the past summer. The program sponsors students to work and travel in the US every year. As a participant, opposed to a tourist, I had a very unique and unforgettable experience living and working with people coming from all over the world. 如果你接下来还要讲『independence』和『responsibility』的话，可能还要 用更深入的实例。 : I think I am a positive and responsible person. I will do my best to learn : everything and solve problems during my stay here. 我不知道你的 email 自我介绍要详细的怎样的地步。不过这两句没有前後文的话， 实在很突兀。 更别提 『I think』这两个字是赘字。放在这没有太大意义。 : Hope we can have a great time and thanks for your help in the future. 个人觉得 『thank ... in the future』这类的句子，西方人并不常见。你可 能是想和日本漫画一样，表达『请多多指教』。 我倒是觉得，真的要讲这样的客套语，也许这样： Please dont' hesitate to contact me if I could be of any help. --

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