: 因为最近实验室仪器故障 必须要与国外厂商联络 : 为了怕外国人有所误会 请各位帮忙看看以下翻译有无错误或语意不对的地方 : 或有更好更有力的说法 谢谢!! : ------------------------------- : 由於在相同的使用者及相同的操作条件下,其他相同机台并无故障情形 : Under the same operation condition and the same users, no other tault : conditions with the same type machines. 这句话没有动词。不过意思对方应该看得懂。 : 而此机台还在保固期内,故障率却如此高, 此次坏掉为第三次 (半年共三次) : This machine is still under warranty, but with such a high failure rate(three : times within 6 months) 这句话语意不太清楚，起码英文版很怪。 This machine has failed three times over the last months. Concerning that it is still under manufacturer's one-year warranty, we don't think the failure rate is acceptable. : 因此我们认为应是此机台本身内部有浅在的未知问题,而导致内部组件的一再故障 : Terefore we think there are some unknown problems in this machine, which leads : to the machine components reapeted failure. (1) 典型国内学生过度使用 "there is/are" 的例子。下次不要看到中文里面有 『有潜在的问题...』就潜意识的搬出 there are。 (2) "which" 用法也不太对。 (3) 不过，Again, 句意没有问题。 We suspect that the machine has a design flaw, resulting in the repeated failure in such a short period of time. : 而在维修两次後却仍屡屡出现状况,因此我们要求替换一新机台。 : After two maintenances, this machine still has some problems, hence : we request a replacement of a new machine.This equipment is definitely a : lemon based on our knowledge and experience of using this equipment. (1) 个人觉得这一句应该放在上一句前面。 (2) 『this machine has some problems』也是中式/台式英文。 (3) 和下一句连在一起看，『因此我们要求替换...』这一句应该用过去式。 (4) "lemon" 常用在汽车。我不知道你的机器是啥。不过可能不适用。 The problem has not been solved even with the two on-site technical services. : 但潘先生您表示替换新品有困难,且本次坏掉的元件可能为PA94 : But you said that the repacing of a new equipment might be difficult, : and also the failure component might be PA94, As far as we know, Applied Materials has refused to send us a replacement of the machine despite our continuous request. (1) 标准滥用连接词 "and" 的例子。前後两句没有关连性。 : 与第二次故障的元件相同,而此元件潘先生您表示其单价极高,更换两次後即会导致 : 您的亏损 : which is the same failure cpmponent when this machine was at the second : failure. And PA94 has the high price so that afer two times of replacing this : component will cause the deficit of you. (1) 这句非常怪。老实说我不知道这句话存在於这篇文章的意义在哪。 (2) "has the high price" 是中式英文。 (3) "cause the deficit of you" 不知道在此处用意为何。 : 上次已经更换过一次,这次也极为可能是此元件的故障,对於这状况我们也感到很抱歉 : We are sorry about that. Because it had been replaced PA94 last time, and : this time the failure should be PA94 failure again. (1) "sorry about that" 在此处很怪。 (2) "it had been replaced PA94" 文法不对 (3) "and this time ..." 又在随意滥用连接词。 (4) "failure should be PA94 failure ..." 也不正确。不过我看不懂你想说啥， 所以也无法建议。 : 但本实验室的操作方式经确认是没有问题的,因此疑为机台本身的问题。 : It is confirmed that our operation is no problem, so we suspect the proboems : are in the machine itself, (1) "our operation is no problem" 是哪里看到的？ (2) "it is confirmed that ..." 也很生硬。 We believe we are not at fault for the repeated machine failures. Hence hereby we list the following demands. : 因为潘先生您表示要送国外维修,为避免此机台之後又有类似状况 : Because Mr. Ban pledged to send this machine abroad for maintenance, : to avoid this machine have a similar situation in the future, 我有点受不了你这样把中文英文不照上下文随意断句。真的很怀疑这是 113 的 水准。 "pledged to send ..." 是什麽？是厂商主动要送国外？真的一头雾水。 "to avoid this machine have a similar situation" 又是台式英文 : 可否请在本次维修後提出原厂提出检验报告及保证,还有其维修报告,信赖性报告等 : could you propose the original inspection report and ensure,as well as : its maintenance report, reliability reports, etc. after this service. Applied Materials is liable for an inspection report conducted by a third-party maintenance provider. : 若无法提出以上可靠性证明,为了确保权益,则希望可以更换新机台 : If you can not make more reliable evidence, in order to ensure equity, you : would like to replace a new machine for us. "more reliable evidence" 完全不知道在说什麽。 "ensure equity" 也不正确。 "you would like to replace" 语意完全相反。 --

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