作者priv (邪恶松鼠)
看板Eng-Class
标题Re: [请益] 请帮我看一下作文
时间Tue Sep 14 16:32:33 2010
※ 引述《endlesssad (无尽伤悲)》之铭言:
: Tips for A Better Sleep
: It is important to have a wonderful beginning in the morning. Therefore,
: we should take a good sleep the night before so tha we can get up early.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ that
这边很拗口的感觉,前一晚应该不用强调吧...
we should take a good night's sleep so that we can get up early.
(应该这样比较顺? 虽然我觉得逻辑还是怪怪的)
: How to sleep well all night? First, don't take whatever bothers us in
: daytime with us into sleep. Relaxing can help everyone to have a good dream.
: Second, if it is hard to fall asleep, drinking a glass if milk is a useful way
of
A suggestion: Do spell check in Word.
: according to doctor's advice. Furtheremore, music can also let us calm down.
^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^ help is better
Futhermore
: Before sleeping, remember to choose a beautiful song which you like. Besides,
这边上下句太牵强,建议再润一下
: it is said that we had better not to watch horrible programs in the evening.
^^^^^^^^ horror
horrible programs是很烂的节目
: It is easy to get a nightmare. Above of all, if those methods can't solve
: our sleeping problems, we should ask for help by a doctor instead of taking
^^ by是错的
try "ask a doctor for advice"
: medicicne by ourselves. Having a bad sleep will ruin or health. Everyone
^^^^^^^^^ again...
: should take it seriously to change the bad sleep.
: Ignoring tiny infection may cause incredible outcome such as the famous
: theory "Butterfly Effect." We should take it seriously as having a good sleep
蝴蝶效应好像不是这个意思 ^^ 怪怪的
: because we obtain the energy we need for a day from that.
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1F:推 endlesssad:非常感谢 09/14 16:37
2F:→ priv:可能我太挑毛病,蝴蝶效应这边应该还ok啦 09/14 16:40
3F:→ priv:刚刚又仔细想了一下 09/14 16:40