作者monkey0524 ()
看板Eng-Class
标题[请益] 自我介绍里的文法问题
时间Sun Jul 18 16:49:50 2010
Hello,my name is XXX. I’m glad to introduce myself to you. I graduated
from XXXXXXX University last year and I just discharge from army as a second
lieutenant. I’m a platoon leader in army and I had learned a lot of things
from army. I’m a easy-going and optimistic person. My interest is baseball ,
table tennis and dog. I am also a member of baseball team in university. I
have many experience of part-time job because I have to pay living expense by
myself. My Japanese language is certificated and I plan to get certification
of English because I’m interesting in English. Except for language, I also
know about computer hardware. When my friend got some problem, they always
ask me for help and I always pleased to help them. I hope I can find a job
that suited to me and get some work experience.
Thanks for your listening.
这是面试要用的英文自介
因为英文说跟写的程度比较不好
觉得整篇下来I 很多 不知道有没有办法让I少一点
麻烦各位专家帮我修改一下了顺便挑出问题点
谢谢
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1F：推 cspy:用别的辞当主词就可以避掉一些I, 还是说连贯起来 07/18 18:40
2F：推 ajia0818:因为你是一句一句想才会这样 另外..my interest is dog!? 07/18 20:54
3F：→ monkey0524:抱歉 中英文转换有点问题 = = 07/18 20:56
4F：→ tengharold:其实文法错误还不少... 07/19 23:19