作者leniency (leniency)
看板Eng-Class
标题[求译] 请问以下段落的翻译
时间Sat Jul 17 22:04:41 2010
求中译：I don't teach you anyway, I think,
just lead you like a scout master,
and hope you'll dip your hand,
into the brook---cold like no
tap water you've ever felt,
let you marvel, a little frightened,
at a snake, mouth agape,
before it darts between rocks,
an image you'll carry for years,
spur you to anger when I won't
stop to let you rest,
even hope you catch poison ivy,
and,as we race up the hill,
urge you on when
you leave me behind,
gasping,
a seeming spear
wedged between my ribs.
属段落：
我的试译：我想我还是不教你了，
只要像一个星探一样引导你，
希望你会把手浸到小溪里---不会像你感觉的自来水一样冷
让你惊奇、有点害怕
在一条张大着嘴的蛇面前
在它在岩石间猛冲时
你将会存有这个景像数年
当我不让你停下来休息的时候
你生气
甚至希望你抓到有毒的长春藤
然後，让我们跑上小山
当你落在我後头时催促你快点跟上
喘着气
像卡在我助骨间的矛一样
提问:
一、这是原文，而不是我故意把它分很多行。想请问诗的分行有没有规则。
如:为什麽cold like no tap water you've ever felt, 要在no和tap
之间分行。
二、感觉很抽象…请问这首诗是想表达什麽?
三、如翻译有误请指正，谢谢!
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