作者supernatural (supernatural)
看板Eng-Class
标题[文法] 请问这样写可以吗?
时间Tue Jun 29 11:37:32 2010
She accidentally ate a carton of chocolate that your boss
want to give to his client.
她不小心吃了老板要给客户的巧克力.
Her boss is very angry,but he don t know who eat chocolate,
he ordered that his employees work overtime.
她的老板很生气 但不知道谁吃了巧克力 所以命令员工加班
请问这两句这样写正确吗? 有错的话帮纠正 谢谢
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1F：→ grandrapid:第一句应该是her boss吧?是你老板还是她老板= =? 06/29 15:44
2F：→ grandrapid:wants 下面应该是who ate chocolates angry句号 06/29 15:48
3F：→ grandrapid:後面But换下一句 06/29 15:48
4F：→ grandrapid:wanted好像比较好 下面一开始你用现在式後面order又变 06/29 15:49
5F：→ grandrapid:过去式,文意有点怪?命令员工加班後还在生气吗?? 06/29 15:50
6F：→ alixia:Her boss was very angry. Not knowing who ate the 06/29 16:59
7F：→ alixia:chocolate, he has everyone working overtime. 06/29 16:59
8F：→ alixia:she ate the box of chocolate which was meant for the 06/29 17:01
9F：→ alixia:her boss' client. (拿掉the) 06/29 17:02
10F：推 sonico:好想比较少看到to V to ... 的句子 (我的经验啦) 06/29 22:44
11F：→ sonico:想请问一般写作会避免这种情形吗? 06/29 22:45