作者lifeC (life trivial)
看板poetry
標題[創作] Autum
時間Sun May 9 22:17:41 2010
Autumn leaf
Turns into a full page of life
Spring fountain
freeing the torrent of pristine streamlights
Summer shine
Glorifying the Journey of solitary dye
Some folks come, some folks leave
In and out through the picture of season
along the river line
One touch, one spark
The rhythm flows
Transforming into a brand new state of winter mind
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1F：推 spacedunce5:要不要改some folks go? 61.228.80.26 05/09 23:15
2F：推 spacedunce5:我是說come/go的parallel structure 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:39
3F：→ spacedunce5:這裡用left會以為是"剩下的" 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:39
※ 編輯: lifeC 來自: 140.112.25.86 (06/30 20:02)