作者imlazy (dear fear)
看板poetry
標題[創作] Your eye
時間Tue Apr 19 21:27:23 2005
Depression makes you cry
All the sadness full of your eye
Under your eyeball is my arduous try
Your tears dry
As the parachute fly
Solitude your thought maybe quiet
Let your stubborn shackle alright
And I will be the light
Illuminate your eye for a while.
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請大家多多指教
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