※ 引述《dale (冰城城主)》之銘言： : I'll begin with the most trivial: I have read this poem : several times, and each time I find myself pausing in : the middle of line 1, i.e., right after "come"; I keep : feeling that it should be "have come" instead. : As for the content -- very exciting. On first read, I : thought: "Yet another poem based on the over-wrought : fairytale," but it's not, and I couldn't have been more : wrong. : After a few reads, I saw something dark and sanguine : in the poem: you've tucked the motifs of self-deceit : and mutilation securely under a peaceful facade -- an : awfully good protest against the glass shoe before us : all! I shuddered when I read, "It looks equally good : when it's red." : The mid-second stanza -- the exchange of conversation, : is confusing. Which makes the poem more challenging : to understand (thence more interesting for the curious : ones, like me). Still, spatial devices could be : employed to help display the logical outline. Just a : thought. : I must applaud your control of rhythm, e.g., the way : the comma on line 3 ties line 2 and 3 together; and the : triplets at the end of the poem. I look forward to : more devices like these. Although I do not really understand the poem, still I really love this piece. I am not very familiar with how to give comments on poems, so I am just going to ask something about it. I'd like to check if my interpretations have gone very wrong or not. 1.Is the speaker one sister of Cinderella, according to the fairy tale? 2.Could I safely say that the sisters' feet are gravely hurt or, more astonishingly, cut? 3.I found the attitude of the speaker curious. I would think that it tries to show how people are willing to sacrifice when that carrot is hung dangling before them? 4.Is the last line "Yes, she is in the kitchen, let me fetch her for you." used to achieve a forboding effect? I guess that none of the two sisters believe that the shoes are going to fit her, and are both expecting the shoes to cut her feet as well. I feel the unnamable suspense when reading this line. --

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