Some minor suggestions ^^ ※ 引述《pennyfrancis (呸尼)》之銘言： : ※ 引述《dvlin (Dee)》之銘言： : : Choose one of the following topics. : : 1. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other : : adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to : : 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to : : support your opinion. : Older teenagers might make decisions for themselves. It is time to be : responsible for themselves. But it is too difficult to make major decisions : for them .They are still young who are not ample experience to help them. have no : Nevertheless , parents play an important role in this period. : Children in this period are usually immature and inconsiderate . Even if even if (conj.) , even if : adults could hardly make a better decision. It goes without saying that the : teenage children can easily make an right choice. So they need experience and , so (conj.) : information from their parent or brothers/sisters. what do you mean? they can easily make an right choice, so they need suggestions? : All they have to do are : listening and thinking. They can learn a lot of experience from their family : step by step. For example, it should be an important decision for the teenage : children is that should I go university or go to work? They should be not 2 verbs in 1 sentence x : experience this before , but their family could. Thus , parents can provide would thus, : their experience and tell them what difference about decisions. ^ is the ^^^^^^ between the : They can not always rely on their family. Growing up , they must judge : their question and make a proper choice. Sometimes , Parents should discuss : with their children . If parents always made decision for their child , the ^^^^^^ make children : young children would have not had a decision-making ability for themselves. ^^^^^^^^^^^^not have (why subjunctive?) : In my opinion , Parents should make important choice when their children choices : were young . However , it will decrease mistakes for young man. I think "it will dicrease the chances to make mistakes for young men." or "decrease the number of mistakes a youn man makes." would be better. BTW, mind the positions of the commas. Your essay is very fluent! I hope I do little help for you. ^^ Welcome to discuss. -- Science is my religion Art is my soul --

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