作者korn31910 (浮出水面的大肚猫)
看板poetry
标题[创作] Parting
时间Thu Sep 29 19:55:48 2011
On the bus there's only silence
Unlike before, as we were
Talking and laughing, sometimes
Blamed by sleepy passengers
So short the time and our way home
30 minutes, how small it is to a day
But so happy I was, I guess you too
Secrets we shared, jokes we told
Were taken away when you left
Like the other passengers, always
I dive into a full blank called
SLEEP
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1F：推 dale:很赞，节奏像在车上一样 09/30 10:22
2F：推 hahastarr:I hate parting OwQ 09/30 12:08
3F：推 spacedunce5:enjambment的效果很令人窒息！ 09/30 16:35
4F：推 hwuna:窒息+1 09/30 22:30
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5F：→ korn31910:Thank you all! 10/06 19:41
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