作者frolicker (像孩子般)
看板poetry
标题[创作] Waiting For That Coming
时间Mon Jun 13 23:03:32 2011
For the reason that spacedunce5 mentioned the qualities of imagism and that
I am a fan of it, I would like to share a poem of this kind that I wrote
experimentally before.
Waiting For That Coming
I'm waiting for that coming
Which shall come
The sky is bright
And the clouds are white
And I keep waiting
With destruction of time
As the crowds going
As the clouds staying put
As the wind walking through me
Such slowness,
From which I want to run away
But I can't
Because of the lightest belief
Of that coming
But it's too light to hold on
Or even to be a thought
Which seems like a feeling
A slightest one that yells
Behind my back, fiercely but quietly
Having me stuck
Then...
An explosion!
Behind my back
And I can move again
Turning back to see－
Oh, I see in the dispersing smoke
An old face
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1F：推 spacedunce5:yes, this poem has images, even 122.124.104.6 06/14 01:44
2F：→ spacedunce5:perhaps coherent imagery, but it 122.124.104.6 06/14 01:44
3F：→ spacedunce5:also has internal thoughts, will, 122.124.104.6 06/14 01:44
4F：→ spacedunce5:feeling----all of which foreground 122.124.104.6 06/14 01:45
5F：→ spacedunce5:the speaker-observer; so would this 122.124.104.6 06/14 01:45
6F：→ spacedunce5:poem be categorized as imagist? 122.124.104.6 06/14 01:45
7F：→ frolicker:thanks for commenting! :) it is a 111.243.214.73 06/14 01:54
8F：→ frolicker:imagistic poem definitely. I wrote it 111.243.214.73 06/14 01:56
9F：→ frolicker:to express that we're all stuck in 111.243.214.73 06/14 01:57
10F：→ frolicker:endless pursuit of some unachievable 111.243.214.73 06/14 01:58
11F：→ frolicker:dream, and when we finally get rid of 111.243.214.73 06/14 02:00
12F：→ frolicker:such pursuit, we're old... 111.243.214.73 06/14 02:00
13F：→ frolicker:would my explanation obstruct 111.243.214.73 06/14 02:03
14F：→ frolicker:readers' imagination? I dont hope so. 111.243.214.73 06/14 02:04
15F：→ frolicker:oh! i'm so sorry that i mis-typed ur 111.243.214.73 06/14 02:06
16F：→ frolicker:name... Apology! 111.243.214.73 06/14 02:07
17F：推 spacedunce5:this type of composition is what I 122.124.96.253 06/14 02:13
18F：→ spacedunce5:support over "pure" imagery, which 122.124.96.253 06/14 02:13
19F：→ spacedunce5:is what i meant by imagism 122.124.96.253 06/14 02:14
20F：→ spacedunce5:it's okay, 大E修文XDDD 122.124.96.253 06/14 02:14
21F：→ frolicker:好啦 我E就是了~XD 06/14 22:13
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