作者amadeus1223 (L'amor Celeste)
看板poetry
标题[创作] In the void b'tween barren land and aloof sky
时间Tue Oct 5 21:01:09 2010
In void b'tween the barren land and aloof sky,
A dim spectre-like cavalier did stride---
A wild drifter of cold and lonely pride,
Which bade him from his companions fly.
I saw afar his pale frame stiff and dry,
So I greeted: "remote traveler, what side
Art thou from, in such a sorrowful ride?"
His eyes pierced mine, yet granted me no reply.
And his fingers caressed an antique lyre.
'Tis a wordless melody sweet but sad,
Soaring from the abyss of human mire;
Enlightened was my heart with dullness clad
To know the grief without a heartfelt ear:
Albeit the strings were outworn, who would hear?*
*From 岳飞 小重山词(知音少,弦断有谁听?)
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Where words fail, music speaks.
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※ 编辑: amadeus1223 来自: 140.119.203.47 (10/05 21:03)
1F：推 spacedunce5:love the imagery!但出格也太多吧XD 61.228.84.17 10/05 21:11
2F：→ amadeus1223:不好意思~出格是指格律吗? 140.119.203.47 10/05 21:18
3F：推 celestial09:like this one :D 114.45.160.203 10/05 21:55
4F：→ celestial09:amadeus is absolutely talented in 114.45.160.203 10/05 21:56
5F：→ celestial09:writing poems and rhyming! :D 114.45.160.203 10/05 21:57
6F：→ amadeus1223:I am flattered:) 140.119.203.47 10/05 22:01
7F：→ amadeus1223:but I'm not talented at all! 140.119.203.47 10/05 22:02
8F：→ amadeus1223:writing poems is a hard work for me 140.119.203.47 10/05 22:02
9F：推 hahastarr:lovely 210.54.148.202 10/06 07:56
10F：→ spacedunce5:yes 61.228.84.16 10/07 19:22
11F：→ amadeus1223:抑杨格真的太难了... 140.119.203.47 10/07 21:45
12F：→ amadeus1223:我只能做到每句十音步这样~ 140.119.203.47 10/07 21:45
13F：推 celestial09:抑扬格是什麽? ^^" 想请教 amadeus :P 114.36.52.112 10/07 23:59
14F：→ amadeus1223:喔喔就是写sonnet的话每句的都要 140.119.203.47 10/08 00:14
15F：→ amadeus1223:iambic pentameter,一个非重音接一个 140.119.203.47 10/08 00:15
16F：→ amadeus1223:重音,总共五组十个音节这样! 140.119.203.47 10/08 00:16
17F：→ amadeus1223:(有错请高手指正~)可是真的很难 140.119.203.47 10/08 00:16
18F：→ amadeus1223:所以我都是马马虎虎每句十音节就算了~ 140.119.203.47 10/08 00:17
19F：→ amadeus1223:抑扬就不去管他了 140.119.203.47 10/08 00:18
20F：推 celestial09:呃。我都全部不管，也不知道 XD 114.36.52.112 10/08 01:16
21F：推 hahastarr:也不知道 +1 XDD 210.54.148.202 10/08 07:09
22F：→ celestial09:haha...握手 XD 我也不懂格律 114.36.55.185 10/08 10:29
※ 编辑: amadeus1223 来自: 140.119.203.47 (10/08 19:48)
23F：→ amadeus1223:我觉得不被形式拘束也很棒啊! 140.119.203.47 10/08 19:50
24F：→ amadeus1223:我用十四行诗的form有时候只是想让自 140.119.203.47 10/08 19:50
25F：→ amadeus1223:己写的东西比较像"诗"~ 140.119.203.47 10/08 19:50
26F：→ spacedunce5:这年头写商籁体的人真的不多见！ 61.228.86.166 10/08 22:10
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