作者raphaella (秋月春风等闲度)
看板poetry
标题[创作] Dreams
时间Sun May 16 09:12:46 2010
Lightly I stepped across your blog
Softly I read your heart
Gently I understand your mind
Truly I know about your great love
Oh, how crystal clear your window is
That I cannot resist your charm
Though you never express your love
I can already feel your goodness
--
I asked Jesus,
" How much do You love me? " L
G O D
" This much," V
He stretched out His arms
E
and died on the cross.
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◆ From: 125.233.72.37
※ 编辑: raphaella 来自: 125.233.72.37 (05/16 10:30)
1F：→ spacedunce5:beautiful! but last line's rime is 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:42
2F：→ spacedunce5:a bit jarring because it is 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:42
3F：→ spacedunce5:feminine whereas all the other 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:42
4F：→ spacedunce5:lines' are masculine; but maybe you 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:43
5F：→ spacedunce5:are expressing the feeling of 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:43
6F：→ spacedunce5:unrequited love? 61.228.85.143 05/16 11:43
7F：→ raphaella:是的，不求报偿 125.233.72.37 05/16 15:58
8F：推 celestial09:赞喔 别无所求^^ 123.193.24.253 05/16 17:28
9F：→ raphaella:其实整首诗都是 feminine 125.233.68.236 05/17 12:34
10F：→ spacedunce5:masculine rimes end with a stressed 140.112.7.59 05/17 12:41
11F：→ spacedunce5:syllable but feminine ones don't. 140.112.7.59 05/17 12:41
12F：→ spacedunce5:it's just a name ^^ 140.112.7.59 05/17 12:42
13F：→ raphaella:感谢赐教 125.233.68.236 05/17 17:01
14F：→ raphaella:所以我是虎头蛇尾吗XD 125.233.68.236 05/17 17:02
15F：推 spacedunce5:有一点，不过如上所述和主题很配xd 140.112.7.59 05/18 19:24
16F：推 ethelya:我爱你~原PO~ 114.41.162.31 05/19 02:24
17F：→ raphaella:趁乱告白吗 XD 125.233.74.223 05/19 10:57
18F：推 celestial09:哈哈哈 英诗版真是有趣好笑 XD 123.193.24.253 05/19 12:16
19F：→ celestial09:btw, 原PO 是谁阿 不认识 ^^" 123.193.24.253 05/19 12:17