作者littlefish76 (小予)
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标题[创作] Wind say
时间Sat Aug 16 15:59:14 2008
if the wind passed my yearming
it can gentlely whisk your face that I love deeply
whisper near your ears
no more ask
becauese the unforgetable gentilesse you gave to me
第一次写，总觉得有点烂
也不知道格式文法对不对
不过还是想PO上来
请多多指教 ^^"
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1F：推 chansaowan:写诗意境重於文法^^加油喔,不过.. 122.120.2.100 08/17 21:09
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