作者korn31910 (浮出水面的大肚猫)
看板poetry
标题[创作] Rebecca
时间Mon Oct 17 01:37:02 2005
She who is never aging by time
Keeps her innocent smile
Alienated from the lonesome city
As a flaming blossoming rose
Bathed in the sun
I wonder if there would be another
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1F：推 dale:我喜欢这首。最後一个字删掉或许会更好。^^ 218.166.76.32 10/17 02:35
※ 编辑: korn31910 来自: 61.229.136.126 (10/17 15:06)
2F：推 korn31910:^^多谢指教 61.229.136.126 10/17 15:06
3F：→ korn31910:修改完成! 重看了一次也觉得删掉比较好 61.229.136.126 10/17 15:07
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