作者PowLluimniz (波西米亚)
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标题Re: [创作] Practice S
时间Mon Apr 25 16:00:32 2005
A very cute poem. A very interesting practice.
Aptly named, aptly maneuvered, good preparation.
The rhythms and the sounds well performed for
the practice of "S," and the action blended
neatly with the scenery. The use of stoppings
was impressive. No major flaws, but that's all.
The only question I have is that if you need
to capitalize the final "s" as in cat"S" (6).
Though radically different, some short poems
by e. e. cummings and Williams Carlos Williams
may interest you.
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1F：推 catcatcatcat:I just want to emphasize the S, so I 210.240.186.37 04/25
2F：→ catcatcatcat:capitalize the final "s". But I am not 210.240.186.37 04/25
3F：→ catcatcatcat:sure whether it makes the poem better or 210.240.186.37 04/25
4F：→ catcatcatcat:not:P Just for fun! 210.240.186.37 04/25
5F：推 dale:For an experienced reader, the final "S" would 218.166.75.30 04/25
6F：推 dale:be noticed -- capitalised or not. :) 218.166.75.30 04/25