To tell the truth, I don't think I understand the poem. I am just pointing out what confuses me. Early in the poem, "first debut" (1) gives me a feeling that this is not the only life of the narrator, maybe just one of the reincarnations; but "the feast" (2) confuses me immediately because there was no clue for the symbol except for "the luscious wine" (3). However, the surging wine sounds weird since the wine should not, normally, be surging from the glass like some magic; and "toxic waste" (4) apparently does not parallel with the wine. Does the first 4 lines mean the narrator is born and forced to have a feast, in which he had no more luscious wine to drink but he could not but feel intoxicated (in a negative way)? The 5th line shifts to a more self-reflective condition; yet "the vast" (5) again confuses me. Does that mean wilderness? Open sea? (the connection to the former lines?) The confusion makes me unable to perceive the struggle of the narrator. I get totally lost in the 7th line, but I seem somehow to understand maybe the narrator is poisoned by the toxic waste. Despite my several problems, the poem rhymes not too bad. It resembles at the first look a symbolist poem, but one may want to make the symbols more prominent. Lastly, I think luxuriant needs an adverb form if it modifies "suffer" (2), and "Drift" (5) an -ing if it modifies the narrator. --

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