作者jdpd (jdpd)
看板poetry
标题[创作] Epiphany
时间Wed May 12 09:20:48 2004
Epiphany
Epiphany is a bubble
That wafts in the sky --
And sparkles within a moment
Before you could recognize.
Watch out your carelessness, and
Beware of your eagerness. 'Cause
The former let it slip, while
The latter pierced it right
Hence capture its beauty
Once you realize.
最後两句总觉得有点奇怪...同学也说若不解释他们看不懂这两句...
不知道大家可否给我一点建议？
而且recognize、realize都是及物动词
若是放在诗中，却没有後面的受词不知道可不可行？
我第二次写诗...写得不好><...请大家多多指教，谢谢:)
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It takes considerable knowledge to realize the extent of my own ignorance.
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