作者sharline1031 (sharline)
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标题[问题] 请高手帮忙看看这篇作文
时间Sun Oct 10 21:38:58 2010
这是我自己写的98年台大外文英作
请大家帮我看看有没有什麽问题
给个意见
题目是回答
Is going back to school in recession a good idea? 这个问题
标题自订
规定要写250~300字,我超过了
还规定要超过四段,不过我只写四段
自己订的标题(烂透了我觉得,标题超难订):
Continue studying or Go to work
Is studying always the right thing? Most people may say yes. However, when
more and more people want to go back to school just because they couldn’t
find a job, their avoidance through studying becomes a problem.
People who avoid to enter the society by extending their student life are
equivalent of lacking enough preparation to plunge themselves into the labor
market. Why do I say that? Being a student is largely different from being a
labor. When you are a student, all you have to do is go to the class, and
hand in your homework on time. Nevertheless, being a labor has to be with
many aspects of ability like being communicative, positive…and so on.
A vivid example is my cousin. My cousin was used be to a shy boy. In his
student life, every time when his professor called him to answer the
question, he shrunk back and not even said a word. People around him were
worried about his future career. However, he made up his mind to change
himself in the last year before he graduated. He started to force him to talk
to ten people every day, and now he becomes the most successful salesman in
his company.
Studying isn’t wrong itself, it can increase competitiveness and enrich our
knowledge. Only we don’t regard studying as a reason delaying entering the
society but just enjoy studying itself. Meanwhile, strengthen all kinds of
abilities, and we will have a more smoothly work life.
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1F:推 Tronga:快推 不然别人以为我们看不懂 10/10 21:41
2F:→ simply5566:你有些句子有两个主词却没有连接词 10/10 21:48
3F:→ sharline1031:哪一段?? 10/10 21:51
4F:推 takuminauki:那127是转上还是原本的学校 10/10 21:56
5F:→ sharline1031:是问我吗??我只是在考虑要不要考而已 10/10 21:58
6F:推 justice1015:结尾好像没给明确的"结论" 不然感觉会更好 10/12 14:33