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标题[分享] 改掉写作口语化的坏习惯Pin TOEFL Lucy
时间Fri Mar 18 13:40:16 2022
【写作】改掉托福写作口语化的坏习惯
Hello 大家好~ 我是Pin TOEFL 的Lucy
本篇文章针对写作常见错误的口语化习惯跟大家参考,平常没有注意到的地方,提点过後,开始有意识的矫正!
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托福写作评分标准项目之一为文章的质量(Quality),内容够不够清楚、架构是否容易理解、以及整体英文阐述的语言程度。托福冲刺期间,每周都有近20位的同学参加我们的顾问写作批改资源,而大家的练习当中,很容易出现写作盲点– 用字遣词太过口语化。
英文作文有一个制式化的标准,往往语气以及词汇选择都是精准的并且无争议性的。相较於跟朋友讲故事的谈话内容、或是写日记的段落,口语化的语言成分务必降到最低。“Colloquial language” 口语化的英文,反映在托福的文章当中会降低你文章的说服力、稳定性,给读者的感官也会因此受到影响。
I. 口语化三大缺点:
过於轻松/不正式
想法不精准/不清楚
太广泛
II. 避免以下的用法:
1. 多余的填补词 –
Example:
‘so’, ‘really’, ‘very’, ‘pretty’, ‘even’
口说当中常常为了增加强调效果或语调效果,在作文中应避免
My professors and even my parents were there.
--> My professors and my parents attended the ceremony.
My internship was pretty successful.
--> My internship experience was a success.
2. 不精准的衡量尺度 –
Example:
Mood – good
Experience – sucks
Giving an Example – basically
Quantity – a lot
怎样的程度,请同学清楚的交代,我们不依赖读者自动理解你想表达的论点
I was feeling good after the interview.
--> I felt confident that I would receive an offer.
I spent a lot of years trying to lose weight.
--> The process of my weight loss journey took four years for me to feel healthy again.
3. 主词、受词随便省略 –
Example:
“in other words, not very helpful”
若是读者跟不上你想表达的资讯,则为无意义的内容 What is not helpful for who?
It is detrimental for people.
--> Sexism is detrimental for women in the workplace.
4. 避免常见SLANG –
Example:
“get in touch with”, “also”, “show up”, “well…”
https://www.engvid.com/english-resource/formal-informal-english/
III. 附上托福Writing Rubrics:
https://www.ets.org/s/toefl/pdf/toefl_writing_rubrics.pdf
在文章中减少口语化的习惯能避免读者的误解、不确定性。只要你在打文章的过程当中有意识地减少这样的习惯,读者一定能更清楚地跟上你的思路。“Well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details.” 托福要求的”容易理解”,从我们写作的精准度下手!
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