作者dvlin (Dee)
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标题Re: [写作班] 托福第50周 dipin, 1
时间Sun Feb 14 14:52:23 2010
※ 引述《dipin (吃喝玩乐满天下)》之铭言:
: 1. A university plans to develop a new research center in your country.
: Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a
: center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds
: of research centers do you recommend for your country?
: Giving the choices between developing a business research center and an
Given
: agriculture research center, it is clear that the first one would be
: more beneficial and suitable for my country, Taiwan, based on the
: reasons mentioned below.
: First of all, in a country with comparably small area, there is no much
relatively not
"comparably" sounds stronger; it sounds like you're actually comparing it
with another specific place, without specifying what it is.
: space for farming. Without the basic requirement of agriculture, doing
: such research will obviously be arduous and probably will end with no
: significant outcome. Having the need of the product of agriculture
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: doesn’t mean my country has to produce it. Hong Kong is a very
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Good point! The "Law of Comparative Advantage" in economics comes to mind.
: good example. The area lacking issue is also serious
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"lack of land" seems to flow with the sentence better
alternatively, "lack of farm land"
or "lack of arable land" sound even more concrete
: there. However, by becoming one of the world’s most important business
: centers, people in Hong Kong can also live well without putting much
: effort in agriculture.
: Second, recently China has become the biggest market in the world.
: Communication is definitely the most essential skill when doing
: business. Because Taiwan and China share the common language, Chinese,
a
: Taiwan has the high potential of becoming another world trade center.
: Furthermore, Taiwan’s geography location can also help the development
geographic
: of business in Taiwan. However, there are still some political issues
: lying between these two counties. Under this complicated situation,
: a good business research center is needed because only through careful
carefully
(don't forget there's another adjective right behind)
: handled methods can Taiwan get the whole benefit doing
: business with China.
: In conclusion, a business research center would be the best choice
: for Taiwan because we don’t have much area for agriculture and
: we need it to know how to do business with China.
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This bit sounds a little odd.
Suggestion: ... to (help) improve our business relations with China.
All in all, well argued!
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1F:→ dipin:Thank you very much. :) 02/21 03:31
2F:推 jasonfghx:改成partnership in business with china 08/06 16:55