作者dvlin (Dee)
看板ST-English
标题Re: [写作班] 托福第47周 hsnudrum, 3
时间Thu Dec 24 05:20:58 2009
※ 引述《hsnudrum (宝宝加油喔!:))》之铭言:
: Some people prefer to live in places that have the same weather all year
: long. Others like to live in areas where the weather changes several times
: a year. Which do you prefer?
: Although there are many people, especially who live in tropical zone, think
^^^^^^^^ xxxxxxxxx ^those ^the
: it would be better to live in the places that have the same wether all year
weather
: long. However, I prefer to live in where it has different wether in a year.
^^^^^^^^^^
有两个重复的问题
可以说"there are many people... who think",或"many people... think"就好
再来"Although many people...
, I prefer"跟"Many people...
. However, I..."
although跟however两个只能选一个 注意逗号与句号的差别
第二句的中间句号改成分号更好
: Here is why.
: First and foremost, I love to participate in different activities in different
: seasons. For example, I would like to go ice skiing or to enjoy hot spring
: in winter; do some water activities like surfing in summer; go mountain
: traveling and biking in spring and fall. As living in the subtropical region,
xx L
^^^^
: where does not have obvious difference between seasons, I always eager to
there is no ^am
^^^
这句可以用"Living in the subtropical region, (where there is...,) I..."句型
因为I am living in [some location] 所以可以说 Living in [some location], I
不需要加As在前面
: experience snowing in winter. I recall that once I went to America with my
: friends in the winter of 2006, we had a lot of fun in playing snowboard in
snowboarding
: Denver.
: Another important reason is that I can have different styles of clothing when
: living under seasons. I can wear my favorite T-shirts and short pants in
: summer, and wear beautiful sweaters and scarfs in winter. With different
: clothing styles, I could develop different feelings and ideas in my life,
: furthermore, I could develop my views of appreciating beauty. The most
. F ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
aesthetic sense or sense of aesthetics
: typical example is that the world's greatest cloth designers always hold
fashion designers
: their clothing exhibitions in the most modern and fashion cities
fashionable(形容词)
: like Toyko, Paris and New York, which all have different seasons in years.
: Admittedly, some people who prefer to live in where its wethers are all the
: same would hold the opinions the advantages of convenience. For example, you
: don't have to worry about how to wear or to take the risk of getting a cold
: under abruptly change of wether. However, for the reasons mentioned above,
: I still would like to have different wethers in a year.
correct spelling: "weather", several places
Good, clear argument. Good organization.
Excellent use of anecdotal example!
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1F:推 hsnudrum:谢谢^^ 01/30 23:19