作者greenvase31 (libertine)
看板ST-English
标题Re: [Work] TOEFL - One thing you can take for a …
时间Wed Nov 5 12:45:19 2008
※ 引述《soundspeed (myway)》之铭言:
: Imagine that you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home
: for a year. In addition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one
: additional thing. What would you take and why? Use specific reasons and
: details to support your choice.
: ==
: Besides clothing and personal care items, I would like to take my notebook
==Besides做为段落开头不适当:
with me for a long trip. The reason why I choose to bring my notebook with me
===累赘====
: is that it provides me a lot convenience in daily life. It is hard to imagine
==a lot of== a lot of convenience?? 看不懂
for me to live in a world without a computer, especially my intimate notebook.
==赘语== ================
intimate notebook常被认为是私密的笔记本,但你要说ㄉ是亲密ㄉNB吧?
: Also, when I feel homesick, documents contained in this machine could help to
: ==================================
docements contained in this machine????????????看不懂您ㄉ意思
pacify part of my pain. Following paragraph would explain why I select my
: notebook as additional one.
: First, since I have formed the habit of using computer as part of my life,
: it is really inconvenient for me in living without such tool. For example,
: everyday in the morning, I browse CNN or BBC website to check what’s
: happening in the world. Almost at the same time, I always open Microsoft
: Outlook to check if I have new emails from my friends and family members.
: Usually, I played some Jazz or classical music to welcome a new day. In
: addition, I always use searching engine, Google, to look for information
: I need. For instance, when I want to find a place, maybe a restaurant or a
: spot, I always type the key words in Google searching bar to find the exact
: location on Google map. It really saves me a lot of time and energy. I guess
: this function is especially necessary when I go out for a long trip.
: Also, I cannot take letters and photographs of my family and friends with me
: all the time since they are heavy and take a lot of space in my backpack.
: If I have a light notebook, I could save these treasure memories in the disk
: of my notebook. Then, every time I miss my family and friends, I could browse
: these documents in my personal notebook to alleviate my homesick.
: To sum up, my notebook has become part of my life. It provides me a lot of
: necessary functions in daily life, including understanding the world,
: communicating with my friends, and even handling my works. Also, it gives
: me a space to collect what I shared with my friends and family. As I’m
: going to somewhere far away for a long time, I really need this additional
: and special one with me.
大概看了依下,发现重点在於中文式思维和用字,许多字词很明显都是查汉英翻译得来,
建议还是要多用英英字典。
偶尔发现这个版,提供依下个人意见,多多包涵。
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※ 编辑: greenvase31 来自: 114.47.45.34 (11/05 12:49)
1F:推 soundspeed:非常感谢指正。可以请您示范一篇非"中文思维"的例子^^" 11/05 13:47
2F:→ greenvase31:网路外国人写的东西不就很多了吗= = 问笨了。 11/05 14:02