作者dvlin (Dee)
看板ST-English
标题Re: [写作班] 托福第19周 ypyp, 1
时间Thu Aug 21 04:27:58 2008
※ 引述《ypyp (牙周病)》之铭言:
: In fact, I am not interested in meeting with anyone famous. Their
: performances and achievements are so well-known that I can easily search the
: information about them( and that's one of main reason why they are regarded
: as famous.) However, if I have to choose one between a famous entertainer and
xxx
: athlete, I probabily choose the later.
^an latter
: Why athlete? The reason is simple: I like almost all kinds of sport, but
^an
: rarely watch TV or go to movies. Thus, it is more likely for me to know a
^the
: famous athlete than a famous entertainer. For example, to meet Michael Jordan
: attracts me much more than to meet Paris Hilten. I am familar with many
o
: sports-- especially ball games-- and I myself play many of them. If I meet a
: famous athlete, I may understand much better one's personal experience,
: enthusiasm on the sport he/she choose, the effort being paid, and the personal
: viewpoint for the sport or the whole professional region.
: I also like to know how the athlete face the great pressure of
: competition, how to overcome the injuries on body, and how to always keep in
^his or her
: best condition-- both mental and physical-- at every important moment on
in
: his/her career. I ever attended school team in university, and I practiced
xxxx ^^^^^^^^^^^(which sport?)
: all skills very hard, but for lacking of a strong mind, or say, sufficient
the lack of
: self-confidence, I can't always perform well in games, and finally because a
, ^
of
: servere injury on my left knee I had to give up. Because this personal
severe ^of
: experience, the opinion form an athlete obviously more meaningful to me than
an opinion/opinions from ^is/would be
: a entertainer.
from an entertainer.
: For one's life, not only the way to achieve success but also the way to
: face failure are important. To be an athlete is a lonely and hard road, one
. O
: has to face harshest competition much more frequently than most of us, and
^the
: thus being a famous athlete, one must have developed his/her own philosophy
: to get along with cheer and frustraton well. If I can meet a famous athlete,
: I believe that I can learn a lot from her/him. That is why I would choose to
: meet an athlete rather than an entertainer.
Although your answer is not quite what the topic is asking for, I actually
think it's a very good take on the question.
On the real TOEFL test, you are only given one topic, and you have to write
on it. Very often, you may encounter a question which you are not able to
relate to, and it may present some difficulties when forming an thesis.
In my opinion, your strategy of writing about choosing between meeting an
entertainer and meeting an athlete is brilliant.
In some other tests, however, when there are multiple topics to choose from,
the evaluator might think that you should have chosen a different topic to
write about instead. This could have a negative effect on your grade.
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1F:推 ypyp:Thank you for your comment. I really appreciate it. :) 08/23 00:52