念书念累了，照您写的结构回一下仅供参考 :) 我直接写我会写的方法，省点时间 请您自行比较有差异的地方 :) In my country Taiwan, we have a special way to deal with garbage. We have to keep our garbage home and wait for garbage trucks coming to collect it. Moreover, we pay lots of attention on recycling plastic products, batteries, and kitchen waste. It is a very amazing custom for foreigners. Thus I think introducing it to others is the most meaningful. My supporting ideas are as follows. To begin with, in the past the residents of Taiwan used to leave their garbage somewhere outside their houses to prevent from the disgusting smell staying inside the houses. However, this selfish action causes serious sanitary problems. For example, there are always cockroaches and other insects seen on the road. These problems make the appearance of our cities look very dirty, and increase the risks of causing infectious deseases. As a result, our government enforces a law for everyone to keep the garbage inside the house until the garbage trucks coming to collect it. This new policy really changes the terrible situations. It not only makes roads in Taiwan cleaner, but also improves the sanitary conditions. I believe that this custom is very special, and it is worthy of telling other people about the story behind this policy. In addition, most of the countries in the world focus on recycling only normal recyclable materials, such as paper, palstic products, and batteries. We all know that it is beneficial to recycle those products, and we get a greener world from it. However, in Taiwan, we pay additional attention on recycling kitchen waste. Sometimes, we cook more than we can eat, and it produces kitchen waste. In the past throwing out the kitchen waste with the rest of the garbage is our only option to deal with it. But now, we know kitchen waste can make useful fertilizers that help plants to grow up. Moreover, recycling kitchen waste reduces both the amount of useless garbage and the associated processing cost. Furthermore, we note that we can make more organic fertilizers by going through a few additional processes on the kitchen waste. It is very important to do something beneficial to our earth, and turning kitchen waste into useful fertilizers is one way of doing it. This is why I think I should tell other people about this special custom of ours. In conclusion, the way we Taiwanese dealing with garbage is beneficial not only to our communities and cities, but also to the living Earth. Nowadays the issue of global warming is very crucial. Therefore how to make our environments cleaner and greener is very important for each resident in this global village. I hope that people can learn our way of dealing with garbage through our sharing this useful custom. If everybody can follow it, I believe that we will have a better living environment. 後记：我觉得您的文章中有不少基本的文法，片语与字的用法，和句子结构上的错误。 如果不先花点时间买本好的文法书扎扎实实地从头写过一回，作文真的很难进步。 或许一本好的片语手册也可以买来当作参考书用。而文章的结构，和练习 把句子写的简洁有力，一字不多，一字不少，那又是另一层功夫了。 基本功不好，我觉得练习了100个题目也是进步有限。我建议不如挑一个自己 喜欢的题目，先写一个版本，然後不断地改进再改进。文法和用字就不用说了， 一句话一个意思可以有很多不同的写法。多练习找出当下最适合的句子结构， 使用最精简的字数。字字推敲常常是必要的，而文章的结构也可以不断地改进修饰。 这样才能一法通，万法通，举一反三。一个题目觉得练习地差不多了，觉得厌烦了， 没什麽好改了，再改下去是吹毛求疵了，再换下一个题目，我想这样练习比较扎实。 其实我们常用的单字，片语，句子结构，文章结构，并不需要很多， 所以扎扎实实地练几个题目，把基本的东西搞清楚一点，会觉得英文进步很快的。 增进写作的能力是一条无止尽的路，与您共勉励！ --

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