作者kapolo (肤浅国度)
看板ST-English
标题[写作班] 托福第16周, kapolo, 3
时间Wed Jul 9 19:32:23 2008
: 3. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Boys and girls
: should attend separate schools. Use specific reasons and examples to
: support your answer.
"Separated or not" is a question of controversy. People have different
notions about the matter: some uphold it as necessary, other condemn it as
"outdated thought". Therefore, I would like to have a look at the question in
this essay to decide how unjustifiable separated schools could be.
One not only the strong points but also the mystery is that separated schools
are a necessary for better educated. In other words, different genders have
dramatically difference way to be taught. First, some people feel
it is hard to schedule both gender in the same standard. It has physical
and mental unlikeness between two gender. More over, separated schools could
let the learning more efficiently by setting the learning outline more
specific for mono gender. That is some people to say separated schools are
a way to improve mono gender learning better.
On the other hand, and the more important, both boys and girls won't live in
a separated society. Both of them will attend a society with two genders
after graduate. Separated schools let them lose the opportunity learning how
to socialize with the opposite sex, which they will work or even marriage
with. It's needed for the people knowing how to treat well to each gender,
and the skill can't study from text, only from daily life. Learning how
to deal with opposite gender in life is more important than study better from
separated schools.
In conclusion, I would like to say that it is not necessary or crucial to
attend separated schools. Without it, boys and girls will have better chance
knowing each other.
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先谢谢罗~^~^Y
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1F:推 outofdejavu:第一段matter後的冒改用句号。 other => others 07/09 22:32
2F:→ outofdejavu:"One not only the strong points but also the 07/09 22:33
3F:→ outofdejavu:mystery" 建议revise 07/09 22:33
4F:→ outofdejavu:necessarry是形容词 07/09 22:35
5F:→ outofdejavu:what do you mean by "etter educated"? 07/09 22:35
6F:→ outofdejavu:更好的教育?教养好的学生? 07/09 22:36
7F:→ outofdejavu:difference是名词 07/09 22:36
8F:推 outofdejavu:第二段的schedule不适用该句 07/09 22:58
9F:→ outofdejavu:both *genders* 07/09 22:59
10F:→ outofdejavu:two *genders* 07/09 22:59
11F:→ outofdejavu:*Moreover* is a one-word form 07/09 23:00
12F:→ outofdejavu:"...let the learning..." 除去the 07/09 23:00
13F:推 outofdejavu:"That is some people...better" 建议revise 07/09 23:02
14F:→ outofdejavu:and "the more important" => more importantly 07/09 23:03
15F:→ outofdejavu:正式写作勿缩写 07/09 23:04
16F:→ outofdejavu:Both of them "will attend" => are in 07/09 23:05
17F:→ outofdejavu:after "graduate" => graduation 07/09 23:05
18F:→ outofdejavu:the opposited sex, "which they will...with" => 07/09 23:07
19F:推 outofdejavu:who may be working partners or spouse choice 07/09 23:12
20F:推 outofdejavu:"for people knowing ... gender" => 07/09 23:16
21F:→ outofdejavu:for the people to know how to treat each/both 07/09 23:18
22F:→ outofdejavu:gender(s) well 07/09 23:18
23F:→ outofdejavu:"the skill...text"=>the skill can not be learnt 07/09 23:19
24F:→ outofdejavu:from textbooks 07/09 23:19
25F:→ outofdejavu:important than "study ...schools"=> 07/09 23:20
26F:→ outofdejavu:studying better in a separated school 07/09 23:21
27F:→ outofdejavu:Learning how to这句 建议加个for a student 07/09 23:22
28F:→ outofdejavu:Learning vs studying 这样才有对称 07/09 23:22
29F:→ outofdejavu:better "chance" => chances 07/09 23:23
30F:→ kapolo:谢谢您的热心指导^~^y 感谢:D 07/09 23:35
31F:→ kapolo:第二段的schedule => 改用assign? 07/09 23:48
32F:推 outofdejavu:请问你的中文意思是 很难用单一标准对待两个性别吗? 07/09 23:50
33F:推 outofdejavu:若是的话 可以用deal with both genders with the 07/09 23:52
34F:→ outofdejavu:same standard 07/09 23:52
35F:→ kapolo:我了解了^~^ 还想请教除了爆多文法错误尚待恶补之外@~@""" 07/09 23:55
36F:→ kapolo:以及许多待revise处@~@""""""""""""""""""""(汗) 07/09 23:57
37F:→ kapolo:请问还有没有改进作文的方法与空间呢? 观点/连贯/词汇量.等 07/09 23:59
38F:推 outofdejavu:多看好文章罗 ^^ 07/10 00:00
39F:→ kapolo:还请您多多指教^~^y 07/10 00:00
40F:→ kapolo:有您的好文章可以看吗:P???? 07/10 00:00
41F:→ kapolo:目前只有想到看Editorial,托福范文 从中揣摩@~@" 07/10 00:02
42F:推 outofdejavu:嗯...另用字若用precise,必勤查字典^^ 07/10 00:05
43F:→ outofdejavu: 要 07/10 00:05
44F:→ kapolo:^~^ 07/10 00:09
46F:→ outofdejavu:我觉得这个网站不错 参考参考 07/10 00:12
47F:→ kapolo:收到^~^~ 之前看作文书都吸收不良 =3= 谢谢啦^^ 07/10 00:18
48F:推 outofdejavu:观点方面尽量是独到见解的,因为cliche大家都知道 07/10 00:22
49F:→ outofdejavu:遇过一个很严格的作文老师,他就很要求 独特见解 07/10 00:23
50F:→ kapolo:的确该想些 独特见解取代cliche来写作文 @~@"" 07/10 00:28
51F:→ kapolo:不过在那之前写作境界还要提升才行 07/10 00:34