: As cities improving, they would all probably face with the issue of 1.improve的用法不对，这里不能只有现在分词。 可以改成：As cities improve或With improvements of cities。 2.face的用法：不能说they would face with the issue... 应该是they would face the issue... 或 they would be faced with the issue... : whether they should destroy the old or historic buildings or not. As a : college student, I think that a city should not destroy these buildings. 不太明白为什麽要提as a college student。 你後面的立论跟这个身份似乎也没有关系，大可不提。 : In the following discussion, I would reason and provide evidence to : support my viewpoint. : Historic buildings can bring a lot of economic benefits to the city, 1.较为简洁的写法：can be economically beneficial 不过你的写法也对，仅供参考。 2.thus不是连接词，不能这样直接连接两个句子， 最好在thus前面加and。 : thus these buildings should not be destroyed. Taking my country for example, taking的主词跟後面子句的主词Tainan不同， 不能用这样的分词构句，不如直接用For example就好。 : Tainan, a city that is characteristic of many historic buildings, has been : the most famous city in my country. The historic buildings in Tainan have : been the most popular spots that people must visit when they go to Tainan. : Hence, I think the historic buildings should not be destroyed because of : its economic effects. because of their economic effects. 因为前面是buildings。 : Second, historical buildings also have great educational function for : our children who live in this city. By visiting the historical buildings, : children could deeply realize the history of the city they live in, not : just only through the pictures and descriptions in their textbook. just跟only的意义重复了，可以用just就好。 pictures也可用illustration这个字，也有「插图」之意。 : Significantly, a city sholud not destroy these historic buildings and 这里用Significantly的意思是？你想表达的是obviously吗？ : replace them with modern buildings base on the cultral and educational : purposes. base-->based sholud-->should cultral-->cultural 除了base以外，其他应该是单纯的打错字吧。 我会建议你把based on these cultural...这个子句提到句首， 表示强调。 : To sum up, given the discussions above, I strongly suggest that a city : should keep its historic buildings without any destruction. without any destruction，你想表达的意思是？ 因为这样写，我不太能理解用这个片语的意思。 请参考，加油喔。 --

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