※ 引述《chileno (老头子)》之铭言： : : I prefer a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings than destroy : 1.我会在prefer後面加that，than後面加to。 : 2.可以参考下面这个句型，会比较像英文： : In my opinion, it would be better if a city tries to.... : 用would表推测，try用现在式则是「假设」的用法。 : : them and replace them with modern buildings, Even the cost of keeping will : 1.Even前的标点错误。 : 2.cost of keeping: keeping是及物动词，我会期待後面有个受词， : 没有受词的时候就会让读者有落空的感觉。 : 其实你要表达的应该是这个字吧：maintenance cost。 : : be more expensive then to destroy and replace them. I think keep the historic : 1.then拼错了。应该是than。 : 2.I think这句应该是这样写：I think that keeping... : keep的词性要改成名词，才能当主词，接後面的will， : 所以要改成keeping。 : : buildings will give us or ours children more benefit then destroy and replace : : them with modern buildings. : 1.benefit後面的then又拼错了。 : 2.than是连接词，前後的的词性必须对等，所以如果前面的keep改为keeping， : 後面的动词就得改成destroying and replacing。 In my opinion, it would be better if a city tries to preserve its old, historic buildings than to destroy them and replace them with modern buildings, even the cost of keeping buildings will be more expensive than that destroying and replacing ones. I think that keep the historic buildings will give us or ours children more benefit than destroy and replace them with modern buildings. : : The historic buildings are indicator of city, keep original face of city : 1....are indicators of a city that keep the original... : 冠词跟关系代名词的用法要加强喔。 : 2.the original face of the city... : 因为这个city必然是前面提过的a city，所以这里要改用定冠词。 : : and blend with another old buildings. Those buildings are taught us or ours : 1.这里用other即可，不必用到another。 : 2.Those buildings teach us... : 这里用现在式表事实，不必用被动式。 : : children its history, let us or ours children learned and understand what its : 1.its是指city还是buildings？如果是city，那离前面的city太远， : 最好不要用代名词；如果是buildings，那要用their而非its。 : 2.这里用let其实不好，不如用make。但不管是let或make， : 後面都不应该出现learned，而且前面要加and。 : 3.its buildings？ : (1)应该用these buildings比较好。 : (2)buildings不会happen，英文会说： : what happened to these buildings : : buildings happened. The historic buildings are indicators of city, keep the original face of the city and blend with other old buildings. Those buildings are teach us or ours children their history, and make us or ours children understand what happened to thoese buildings. : : If destroy them and replace them with modern buildings, the towering : : buildings are too sharp to congruous with the other. If two building as close : 这句要整个改了。 : If we destroyed them and replaced them with modern buildings, : these towering buildings would be too sharp to be congruous : with others. : 1.我用的是与现在事实相反的假设，假设我们还没毁掉这些历史建筑， : 所以动词时态改为过去式。当然，单纯假设的话，用现在式也是对的。 : 2.If引导的子句没有主词，所以我加了we。 : 3.congruous是形容词，不是动词，不能直接加在to後面。 : 4.the other表示只有另一栋建筑，语意不对，所以改成others， : 而且去掉限定的the。 : : as each other, one of those is a historic building, another is a modren : 1.这里没有必要用as close as each other。 : 这样讲会变成「跟彼此一样接近」，意思不对了。 I want elucidate that are two buildings stand here closely. : 2.你已经限定只有两栋，前面是one，後面就应该是the other， : 而非another。 : : building, I don't think historic building is better then modren building, : 1.假设的语气，还是用would be代替is比较好。 : 2.打错的字就不再提了。这行打错两个字。 : 3.两个building都是单数名词，却都没加冠词。 : : because both building have characteristic by themselves. So, we can't abandon : both buildings have characteristics of their own. : : one of them. : either of them才对。 If we destroy them and replace them with modern buildings, these towering buildings would be too sharp to be congruous with others. If two building were standed here as close as each other, one of those is a historic building, the other is a modern building, I don't think the historic building would be better than the modern building, because both buildings have characteristics by their own. So, we can't abandon either of them. : : Maybe living in a modren building will be more comfortable then a old : : building, but the historic building is necessary in a city. If we can keep it, : : we should do it. Not only can we learn history about it like virtu, but also : : historic buildings is human cultural heritage. : 错误前面都说明过，所以这段我就直接打了。 : Maybe living in a modern building would be more comfortable : than living in an old building. However, historic buildings are : necessary to a city. If we can keep them, then we should do it. : Hitoric buildings are cultural heritages of mankind, and we : can learn history from them, as if they are antiquities. : 最後一句原文的意思不是很清楚，我可能有些误会你的想法， : 可以再修正。 : 最後总结提醒： : 1.请注意冠词的用法。 : 2.请注意名词跟动词「数的一致」。 : 3.假设语气的用法要加油。 : 4.one, the other; one, other, another的用法最好再研究确定一下。 : 请参考。加油罗。 Maybe living in a modern building would be more comfortable than living in an old building.However, historic buildings are necessary to a city. If we can keep them, then we should do it. Hitoric buildings are cultural heritages of mankind, and we can learn history from them, as if they are antiquities. Thank you very much! I will get more study. -- Have a nice day. --

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