作者dvlin (Dee)
看板ST-English
标题Re: [板友] jeff8611 / [写作班] TOEFL 10-5
时间Fri May 9 23:14:39 2008
※ 引述《jeff8611 (我不是绿茶粉)》之铭言:
: 我只是个高中生
: 超担心写不好会被鞭 科科
: 第十期 第五题
: Every one has curiosity toward the unknow things. Theacher also
Everyone unknown Teachers
: suggest that we try some novelties. However, it seems that not every one are
everyone is
: willing to take challange.
challenge
: According to a phycology report. People feel safer while they are in
psychology
: the familiar space. This can explain why people are prone to do what they are
^^^
: well-practiced, rather than the thing they don't know.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ things
have well practiced for
*
*the object being practiced on is not "people", but "what people do"
: Second, there's no people but hate to be embarrassed. We prefer to
Secondly, no one likes to be embarrassed.
: do what we can control. Lest anyone see us behave silly.
, lest
: For example. Language. Ican communicate with people by using English.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
*These are incomplete sentences.
suggestion: "Take language as an example."
: But when I chat with my English teacher. I prefer to use Chinese rather than
,
: English. Chinese is my mother language. I know what I am saying and I'm sure
: That I won't say any stupid words while I speak in Chinese. On the other hand,
: speaking English cause me feeling nervous. I'm affraid to make a mistake
"makes me feel nervous" afraid
or "causes me to feel nervous"
: during the conversations.
: Combine these two reason. I am the guy who tend to do what we are
reasons, tends he is
: familiar with. After all, not every one is an adventurer.
everyone
: 献丑~
Your English writing is pretty good for a high school student! I think your
reasoning and arguments are very clear. I only have a couple of suggestions:
"everyone" means 每个人 and "every one" means 每一个 (unspecified).
Pay attention to incomplete sentences, and maybe use a spell check.
Good job! I look forward to reading more from you!
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※ 编辑: dvlin 来自: 99.231.10.180 (05/09 23:42)
1F:推 jeff8611:我的拼字真悲惨... 05/10 18:52
2F:→ dvlin:建议写完以後检查一下拼字 或者用spell check 05/11 22:13
3F:→ dvlin:单字多看多写 就越来越不常错了! 加油! 05/11 22:14