作者dvlin (Dee)
看板ST-English
标题Re: [写作班] 托福第4周 JennyQ-2
时间Fri Mar 14 04:16:58 2008
※ 引述《jennyQ (fitness)》之铭言：
: 1. It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built
: in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
: Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
: It would be so great to know that a new restaurant may be built in my
: neighborhood! It's an exciting news for me, an eating-out person. When it
: comes to eat, I'll bother with not knowing what to eat. For a full time
eating ^^^^
*Consider "I always..." or "I often..."
: student with lots of studies to do, it is impossible to cook at home,
studying
: and there is not much time for eating leisurely. So, I'll be glad to
: welcome my new restaurant neighbor.
: I am not a picky person about food, as long as the food is passable,
: I would finish it. Cons quently, no matter what the restautant sells, so
^e
: leng as their price are reasonable for me, I can accept to have one new
long ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
*Consider rephrasing this
: restaurant choice. Since it will be built in my neighborhood, I can save
: time from traffic.
: However, having a new restaurant neighbor would be a bad idea if the
: possessor of the restaurant doesn't care about how to treat nearby
owner
: environment.
: Dumping out garbages and clamor of the guests would be bothersome events
^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^ xxxxxx
the clamoring
*If you're using "clamor" as a noun, this could mean the restaurant is
"dumping out clamor", which makes no sense. Therefore, use the gerund form.
: to neighbors.
^my
(A restaurant is not residential, and the owner(s) might not live there,
so the "residents" are
your neighbors, not of the restaurant.)
: Having a new lunch choice is fabulous to me. Only if the people working
Unless...
: in new restaurant pay attention to public affairs, I think there is no
^don't ^don't any
: reason for me to oppose this plan.
Written this way, this sentence might be a little easier to get.
: [ thanks for any advice ]
Your opinions are nicely expressed. Good article!
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※ 编辑: dvlin 来自: 99.231.10.180 (03/14 04:20)
1F：推 jennyQ:thank you so much! I should be more deliberate. 03/14 12:10
2F：推 jennyQ:what about " I can accept the idea to have one..."? 03/14 12:16
3F：→ jennyQ:will it be more reasonable? 03/14 12:17
4F：→ dvlin:"I can accept..." seems like you don't have an opinion 03/14 12:19
5F：→ dvlin:about it either way. 03/14 12:19
6F：推 jennyQ:why can't I use "possesor"? 03/14 12:19
7F：→ dvlin:How about "I like the idea of having another restaurant 03/14 12:20
8F：→ dvlin:choice."? 03/14 12:20
9F：→ jennyQ:so, can I convert it to "agree" or something else? 03/14 12:20
10F：→ jennyQ:thanks. ^^ I got it. 03/14 12:22
11F：→ dvlin:Using "possessor" not wrong. However, using a more 03/14 12:23
12F：→ dvlin:obscure word over a mor common one is not good practice. 03/14 12:24
13F：推 jennyQ:quite to the point! >.< I'll be careful about it. 03/14 12:25
14F：→ dvlin: more 03/14 12:27