作者mingtai1 ((￣︿￣メ)╭∩╮)
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标题Re: [写作班] JennyQ - 托福第一周 1
时间Thu Feb 7 14:57:08 2008
Some minor editing.
※ 引述《physheepy ()》之铭言：
: Some suggestion.
: ※ 引述《jennyQ (默默静静)》之铭言：
: : The main reasons for people to attend college is to gain professional
reason
: : knowledge and skills. Besides, going to college may also improve one's
: their
: it's corresponding to people
: : social ability and cultivate one's independence, since most of the college
: their X X
: : students live far from their hometown. My personal experience and actual
: : observations have led me to say so.
: observation
: I think the two words should be both sigular or plural, and I think
: the sugular ones are better here.
: : I have just graduated from university. Things what I have learned
: X
: : there were not just all about my major, though it's also important to study
: X
: : those subjects. My major is Pharmacy, which is difficult and consumes time
: : very much. I had to study hard, take much time discussing homework with my
: and spend
: : classmates, and search the internet or look up papers in the library to solve
: X searching the Internet and reading papers....
: : problems. By teamwork, it saved me lots of time; furthermore, I learned more
: put this phrase after "time"
: : about cooperation with others.
: : The university which I studied is far from my hometown. It was the very
: in was I think "is" here is ok?
: : first time for me to leave my parents. Everything I need all have to be
: X has
: : prepared by myself, such as commodities, finding house to rent, and financial
houses
: : management. Those things were not easy to me at first, so I had to be strong
: for
: : and learn to be independent. This really helps me grow up.
: learned helped
: : Reasons for people to attend college are well documented, and the reasons
: interpreted X
: : for me are that I can obtain not just powerful professional knowledge but social
: is only
: : skills and personal independence. My college life did cultivate me into a
: : mature and professional one.
: person
※ 编辑: mingtai1 来自: 116.59.153.140 (02/07 14:58)
※ 编辑: mingtai1 来自: 116.59.153.140 (02/07 15:00)
1F：推 jennyQ:I didn't notice that. really Thanks^^ 02/07 15:06
2F：→ mingtai1:sorry some words are still not highlighted ;( 02/07 15:06